It is used often but it does fit the story. It might attract some readers but if you can use something more eye-catching, it will be great.

The description and foreword are too long from my liking. I'm afraid everything will be given out through these and readers won't be attracted to your story. I suggest you to shorten it a bit and keep some of the information. Also, I don't think the characters in the foreword are that necessary as you can tell about them through the story.

For me, the graphic fits the story :)

I love how cocky and jerks are Mark and Jackson but the girls are just plainly too innocent from my liking. I'm expecting the girls to be bold throughout the story but they're only being bold at the end of the story. It frustrates me a little.

I absolutely have no problem with the appearance of your story. Easily read :)

Credits for the plot twist in the end of the story. But maybe a little bit cliche as the story flows. I wish there are more plot twist in the chapters but I'm grateful there's plot twist in the end.

The flow of the story is too fast. I mean like you revealed that they meet each other on the first and second chapter. Maybe you can start slowly with more introduction of the characters first.

Written neatly but as I said the flow of the story is too fast, therefore I need to catch up and maybe you rushed a little bit with what you wrote. I'm afraid the feels of your story can't reach the readers.

I don't think I found any major nor minor grammar mistakes but I found a lot of spelling mistakes so I hope you can recheck your spelling soon :)

I enjoy your story, honestly. The plot twist in the last chapter excites me the most. But I hope you can slow down with the flow and express the characters through the story more. Shorten your foreword and description a little bit and recheck your spelling. That will be great :)