The Glass Ghost
PG
76
/90
inspirit_chan
INFO
OG (6 Chpt)
Tao (EXO) x OC
Angst, Slice of life, Drama, Romance
B*G
SUMMARY
After an attempt at suicide by jumping off a building, Lee Eunhae is left with depression, a broken arm, and the loss of her best friend. She begins to find herself completely lost, dreams shattered, salvation ruined.
Life, as she knows it, suddenly becomes meaningless.
In this tale, follow the journey of a young girl who's lost her will in the journey to find a better life with the grudging hand of a helping classmate.
PiperGrace08
12/01/2015
TITLE
The title really drew me in. it really fits the main character, Eunhae. good job.
9
DESCRIPTION / FOREWORD
AWESOME. it gives the reader a taste of what is coming without giving everything away. it brought up the reader's curiousity. well done!
10
GRAPHICS
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CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT
I really like the way you potrayed Tao. however, as i see in Chapter 5. Eunhae seemed.. ordinary. in my opinion, as a person who commited suicide and had a miserable past. Eunhae have to take a lot of time to become friends with someone. especially her opposite gender. walks away whenever someone talks to her. in this story she's just.. less introvert. but for the rest of the characters, you did great.
7
APPEARANCE
the font aren't too big or too small so it doesn't bother the reader. the story was structured clearly so the readers can follow the storyline easily. full points!
10
ORIGINALITY / PLOT
i really, really love the plot. it's not cliche and not typical. a girl who had a miserable past, struggling to have a better life. it's not everytime i would find this kind of story.
9
FLOW
the story flows smoothly. however, the story was mostly Tao's part, despite the title that refers to Eunhae. i hope you'll make Eunhae's part a little more. you know.. showing her past and all. it would be better if you put her POV in the story. so the readers would get more feel.
7
WRITING
you convey the ideas in a unique way. but since not all the readers had english as their first language, i think it's better for you to put simpler words so they can enjoy your story even more. english isn't my first language as well. so sometimes i kinda hard to picture it in my mind.
8
GRAMMAR/SPELLING
i found one little mistake: 'the same girl he had scene with Kris in the cafe'. i think you mistyped it because it should be 'the same girl he had seen with Kris with the cafe'. but beside that? i didn't spot any confusing sentence. you did a good job.
9
GENERAL ENJOYMENT
i love the part when Tao brought Eunhae to her home. it's cute and sweet! i enjoyed your story and i'm anticipating for the update.
7
COMMENTS AND THOUGHTS + REMINDER
Comments and Thoughts: keep up the good work! ^^
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