You changed your story title during the time I was first reading it, but it's fine. Anyway, I found the new title better, in some sense, it gave a more complicating and mature feel for the story line and it opened up my curiosity to read it. Well done!

I absolutely loved your foreword and description! You used simple words but yet made it sound complicated and gave a dark and sad aura to the storyline. You even put in a little extract in the story and trailer was amazing! And the character chart was a good idea for this story since well, I found that it was good of you to introduce your characters first since you did tag this story under "twist". Also yeah, great job for crediting all the peoples you hired! ^^

Your poster matched with the theme and tone with the story and definitely set in the mood and atmosphere to make the story effective! Your trailer also gave a very dramatic and nice touch. Whoever did your graphics did a brilliant job capturing the essence of it.

The characters are portrayed in a realistic way, they don't sound at all superficial. I really admired how you developed and chose the way you created your characters. You did an astounding job with your character development, there were a lot of twist and turns plus unexpected changes in your characters. Daebak author-nim!

The font that has been used fits the story very well, it is very convenient to read the story. It's not too large or not too small that it could bother the readers to continue reading. The story is very well structured and therefor easy to follow. I also loved your layouts! They brought the whole story to life and played well with the text!

This story is definitely an original! It was so cleverly written and you have such great talent and purely big imagination to come up with a plot like this! Words cannot express of emphasise any further how I feel about this section.

Your flow was spot on it flowed beautifully from the beginning to the last chapter! It was like I was in a movie watching scene after scene. Full marks for this one!

Like I said in the originality and plot section, this story was definitely a clever idea. Your ideas are well conveyed in this story and it's also rather clear how you want the story to go on. It's very understandable and enjoyable to read your story. Your story played like a movie in my head, I could picture everything very well and your writing was truly beautiful.

There were some grammar and spelling errors in all of the chapters, they weren't too bad but it's too much for me to list down. Please go back to them and re-read to fix those mistakes. (I know you're editing now, so maybe you have fixed some of them :) )

I can honestly tell you that I thoroughly enjoyed reading and reviewing this story. You did an extravagant job with it and I can see your heart and soul poured into this. You have an amazing gift for writing and all I can do is encourage you to write more!