Title: Two Sides Of A Coin
Author: krisyeollized
Characters: Baekhyun and OC
Genre: Drama, Family
Rating: PG
Status: Completed (One-Shot)
Description: "it takes a flip of a coin to another, that was Emma thought when Baekhyun needed her. Baekhyun is slowly breaking the moment when Emma fixes their cracks.
And there were only two sides of a coin.
one was Emma and second was break"

Title (9/10):
it fits the story well. It does have a meaning that is relevant to the story. This is my opinion, it's like their personality are unpredictable. You never know which side of the coin will shown after you throw it. It doesn't sound boring even though you repeated it quite often. And it does draw the readers into your story. '-'b

Description & Foreword (9/10):
yep, i like the way you put the description. It make the readers curious and wants to read more.

Graphics (10/10): 
the graphics is AWESOME. It's very dark and mysterious. And i love the coin that spnning showing each side. It pictured the story. I give you full points.

Character Development (8/10):
the characters potrayed in realistic, yet unique way. I love how you describe the characters. Like i said, Emma and Baek are hard to predict.

Appearance (10/10):
i don't see anything wrong here. The font isn't too large or too small so the readers can read your story easily.

Originality & Plot (10/10):
again with full mark. The story is very unique. I never read a story like this before. Your story isn't cliche at all as it kept giving me goosebumps. The sad parts are also very shattering. Good job!

Flow (6/10):
i'm sorry. I do love your story. It just that it's a little confusing. i have to re-read some paragraphs to understand the storyline. I must say there are some parts that i don't understand. Example, why they suddenly got into a "test"?, who is that"boss"? Etc.

Writing (8/10):
i like how you used difficult words. That means your english are good. I'm serious, there are some words that i haven't know what it means, hehe. But i suggest you to put more simple words, so the readers can enjoy the story more without confused about grammars. Oh, and i love the way you write the ending. It makes me let out a sigh of relief. Happy ending~ ㅋㅋㅋ

Grammar & Spelling (7/10):
there are some mistakes, not much, but there are some.

First, when Baek called Emma/Emma's mom, "Missus Jung." The last time i checked there's no word of "missus". I thought it's just a typo, but you used it twice. If it's for Emma, then change it to "Miss Jung." It it's for her mom then change it to "Mrs. Jung".

Second, instead of "he'd say". Use, "he/she/i/they said"

and third, this part at the ending:
"he'd wipe my tears when i'd cry, he'd give me a warm embrace for comfort. He'd oftentimes hold my hand when we walk. He'd kiss my forehead when he tells me everything would be okay."

i think it has to change to,
"he shed my tears when i cry. He gave me a warm embrace to comfort me. He often hold my hand when we walk together. He kissed my forehead when telling me everything will be okay."

But it's okay since english isn't your first language. It isn't mine as well. Sometimes i'm wrong at grammars too. Hehe.


General Enjoyment (8/10):
so far i really enjoy your story. I love the part when Baek read the letter Emma gave. It's very touching. But i don't really like the part when they were in a "test", it's a bit confusing for me. BUT, although the story is a bit confusing, it somehow made me want to keep scrolling down. It brought up my curiosity.

Total score: /100
Reviewer: PiperGrace08
Reviewed on: 21/08/2014
Comments and thoughts: your story is very unique! Or.. how should i say this? Anti mainstream? Haha. The thing is, I like it '-'b. Don't give up on writing and keep up your good work, okay? Fighting ^^9


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