Twinkle, Twinkle, Little Star
NC
87,5
/90
overdosagexo
INFO
One-Shot (C)
Byun Baekhyun
Horror, death, mystery, thriller
One-person-story
SUMMARY
A narration from the killer's point of view
I am watching you sleep. You look so pretty, lying on your bed with the covers half-thrown off. It's not hard to look at you, even when it's daytime. You never seem to catch me staring at you, observing you. You're on a short vacation, a welcome change to all the performances and comeback stages. You've always been a deep sleeper from my observations, and I'm thankful for that fact as I tie your wrists together and bind your feet. After that, I shove a gag into your mouth, successfully waking you up. I take delight in watching you make sense of everything, a thrill runs down my spine when horror registers in your eyes as you realize who, or what, I am.
nataliechengg
10/01/2014
TITLE
I really liked the title, but I didn't quite understand what it has to do with the story much
9
DESCRIPTION / FOREWORD
Your description is absolutely perfect! It explains pretty much what the story is about, but I think it's a little long, when people read descriptions it's really short.
9.5
GRAPHICS
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CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT
This- yes it was. Baekhyun was very realistic, and who knows how his reflection acts, but I like how you showed the innocent Baekhyun, then then other Baekhyun.
9.5
APPEARANCE
The appearances are nice, it's really easy to read.
10
ORIGINALITY / PLOT
I don't know what to say. I ABSOLUTELY LOVE the plot. I, personally, would have never guessed it was Baekhyun at all. It has to be my 2nd horror story I've read on AFF and it's really good, very mind blowing.
10
FLOW
: I thought it went nice, easy to understand, except the beginning, but that's always confusing to me.
9.5
WRITING
The way you write this story was really nice; the way you made it sound like another person, but have clues who the real culprit is.
10
GRAMMAR/SPELLING
There are none. Reading over it twice, I did not read or see any grammar or spelling mistakes.
10
GENERAL ENJOYMENT
I loved this story! I loved how you made things different from other stories I've read. Chapter 3-- the explaining part-- I was so mind blown, I remembering being like, "OMG! NO WAY!" Even so the beginning was quite confusing and honestly, I was scared to read this story-- since I'm not really a horror fan. But I liked it. ^^
10
COMMENTS AND THOUGHTS + REMINDER
Comments and Thoughts: Sorry TT.TT I honestly didn't mean for it to take this long; it's that my teachers were blabbing about my exams to me all week. And I know it's my first exams, since I'm only in Junior High, but I really like your story and hopefully your story gets more noticed because it is, in fact, a really deep meaning story.
Reminders:
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Credits to nataliechengg [NC] @ Steph's Bookclub Review Shop ©
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