B#5 | Dondodon | funkybastard
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Title
Author
Characters
Category
Genre
Status
Dondodon
funkybastard
Tao, Kris, Sehun
(BxB)
Romance, Drama, Comedy
One-Shot
Description
Tao has a big giant crush on Yifan and Sehun is a big giant er. That's pretty much it. Oh, and Tao hates it when people call him Taozi.
Title
The title is sure unique, but readers might not know what the meaning is behind the tittle. But that doesn’t stop to let the reader figure out what the story is.
Descr.&Forew.
The description and forward is short, but since it is a one-shot, it gives off a good amount of what might happen. It also give the reader a little laugh when Sehun is mentioned as a “-blocker.”
Graphics
Since the story doesn’t have a poster, it doesn’t give the reader a solid thought of what the story is. The background/layout is very child-like which seems to fit the story.
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Char. Dev.
In general, Tao is the one that really one develops. Kris doesn’t necessarily change until he confesses to Tao. But Tao only develops quickly.
Appearance
The font is good for readers to read. Some parts of the story seemed a little unclear.
Orgin.&Plot
The plot is a little cliché, but having Sehun as a kid and a -blocker is sure amusing. The plot moves very fast, but again, it’s a one-shot.
Flow
Again, flows a little too quickly, but ends sweetly giving a reader a smile at the end.
Writing
Your writing was a little complex. It varied from complex to simple sentences. Sometimes it would be hard to picture what you were describing and confusing.
Gramm.&Spel.
Since you claimed English wasn’t your first language, seeing grammatical errors were ok. To be honest though, although you used wrong words or spelt words wrong, the reader was still able to understand the story.
Gen.Enjoym.
The story was good all through the end. But like early, it flowed to fast and some parts didn’t make sense. Love Sehun though, so cute and funny. Don’t be let down by the low scores, at least it’s something. I hope this story gets more views and I hope you continue writing!
Title : 7/10
Description & Foreword: 7/10
Graphics: 5/10
Character Development: 5/10
Appearance : 8/10
Originality & Plot: 6/10
Flow: 6/10
Writing: 6/10
Grammar & Spelling: 6/10
General Enjoyment: 7/10
63 / 100
Reviewer: WRX161
date : 15 / 03 / 2015
CREDITS :
Credits to WRX161 [WRX] @ Steph's Bookclub Review Shop ©
COMMENTS / Thoughts & REMINDER
Comments & thoughts
Just like the General Enjoyment, don’t give up. As you practice writing more, your English and writing style will get better! Good luck!
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