The title fits the story very well. It's very relevant to the story as well. I do think it's a very unique title, you don't come accros the title very often here on AFF. Well, I personally didn't see that kind of title yet so. When I first saw this title without reading or knowing about the genre, I thought by myself: "this title has a nice ring to it" But than on the other hand, I got like that creepy feeling that the title was only the beginning of what we could expect from your story. And that gave the feeling away from sadness. For me, it did trigger my curiosity to read on. Well done, for the choice of your title.
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DESCRIPTION / FOREWORD
The description fits the story perfectly. It's like unintentionally this is your introduction to the story. I must be honest with you, if I didn't have the description to start the story, it would be like we enter the story in the middle. Thanks to your description your get a quick recap in 1 or 2 sentences of the pre-history before it all happens. Your description is very short but oh so to the point, we don't any more or any less. It's just enough. It should trigger the readers attention and curiosity to start reading the story. Because it's a bit of mystery yet so angsty and you also get a bit of sad feeling.
As for your foreword, you used it to place an author note in it. It's a clever choice, because in your author note, you let us know why you wrote the story and it's good to inform about the feeling of the story and the trigger warning.
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