I definitely love your description. If nothing else, it’s a hundred percent that your description drew me into your story. The angst and the hate are evident in the words, as well as the longing and the love - it’s something that can’t be explained through words, but through emotions. You’ve even ended the description with a rhetorical question, engaging the readers and making them want to find out what the answer to that question is.

For your foreword, you’ve written a prologue of the story. In some sense, this is a good thing because your readers may want to have a taste of what your writing style is like, as well as the story itself. It’s almost acting like a blurb of a book if you didn’t have the description. The way you’ve written your prologue is very effective. You’ve basically introduced the characters and their backgrounds without doing a character description section. Most readers would most likely want to read on from reading your prologue to find out what happens at the end.