In Latin.^^ Snazzy. I’m currently taking Latin, so that just made me like it even more. And its meaning fits with the story, too. I would give bonus points if possible.^^

The simplicity and light formatting really capture the mood of the story; however, there is some font that is too light/cramped to read very easily. I would rectify that. As for the content, nice and simple as well, although the idea is a little drama-like, which might turn some readers off. The “Description” section was very nice, though. Intriguing.

The graphics are good but overboard. The poster is too busy. There should be a calmer, focused feel to the poster. Also, the title should be easier to read. I like the subtitle.^^

I think its too early in the story to tell how the character development is coming along, but it seems to be going well. However, since it is early, I haven't given all 10 points since this might change. So... Keep it up.^^

The font is big enough to read. While it’s ok for me, I’ve seen instances where some readers are overwhelmed by larger groupings of words such as your paragraphs.^^ I’d probably increase the spacing to double space and then put it in the editor. Also, I like the quotes before the chapters.

The set up of the plot seems like a mish-mash of some drama themes and there are some recurring fanfiction themes present, but in reality, if a formula works, why not put it to use? Additionally, the story’s individual originality should be the main focus of this section of the evaluation, and after reading it, it seems like an independent enough story.

The story flows like a narration, as I am sure it’s meant to do. I have no major comments or complaints.^^

This is pretty good writing so far. There are some grammar mistakes scattered here and there, but a nice picture is evident in my head. Again, I have no major complaints or comments.

The number of grammar mistakes or awkward wording was minimal, and when such errors did appear, they did not take away from the meaning or flow of the story.

I really enjoyed this story. I really liked the image that I thought up in my head. Props to you for making it possible to create that world in my head.^^ That means that you've done a pretty good job of describing things. I would definitely stay subscribed out of interest in the story. You also have a nice general setup going on here. Again, I just have to mention that the imagery I have in my head is really nice. I don't know exactly why I keep on talking about this... In any case, I'm quite imaginative, and I like making movies in my head whilst reading. This particular movie is really nice and pretty so far.^^