think you have chosen a very appropriate title for this story. Though the words itself doesn’t mean a lot but once you read the story, everything will connect together and you realise how everything fits together. I’ve also tried searching the title in AFF’s search bar and since you’re the first story that comes up, it means that the title is pretty uncommon on AFF. Well done!
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DESCRIPTION / FOREWORD
I think the way you started the description with a quote is quite clever. However, even though it’s in speech marks, it doesn’t appear in the actual story. Yugyeom doesn’t say it in the main chapter but I presume that it was something that Yugyeom had in his head during the story. Just from reading the description and the foreword, your readers can tell that this is going to be a angsty and unrequited love story. Even though the first sentence is not from the story, the lines from the second part is from the chapter and therefore it gives a taster of the chapter and your writing style, allowing the readers to know whether this story is their style or not.
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