It is a sure fit for the story but I don't like it. This is not my style for exo-l's term. I am sorry I am lame but back to the point. The title somehows reveal the possible plottings to me which is death or someone leaving, which is also death. I would always and never stop suggesting this to my requesters (is that even engligh? XD) to make the title of the story as eye catching as possible. Best is that it is not seen on AFF often and create a title that will trigger the reader's attention and curiosity. Unknowingly, they will want to find out more and start reading the description and then the whole story. A good title is a good head start. For your case, it is not my style because it reveals the one-third of the plotting to me as well as it doesn't trigger my interest that much. One being maybe it is too long and two I don't like reading what I can half predict. Please I do suggest a change of title here.
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You description is just near per to the fect! Almost perfect ish we got right here! With a better title and an almost perfect description like yours, it will definitely trigger my interest as well as the other readers. The description does not give away the whole story at all which is what I like. It made relevant point to the story and tells me that it has something related to war-ish and the quote is not needed but when I finish reading it, I understood the meaning behind the quote thus it is a plus point! However the little scenes of Chansoo's romance story shown in your description is what never make it a perfect because if I was a random reader, I would like to find out Why Kyungsoo is blind myself and to be honest, I would want to find out everything by myself though the story. I wouldn't want it to be reveal at the description itself. This is another thing that can trigger a reader's curiosity which is leave them hanging with a question that they will only know the answer if they read the whole story. So remove just that Kyungsoo blind part maybe and maybe the short scenes too. Hehe. Your forward is fine. It is meant for authors to credit as well as their personal message to the readers so yeah. I have no issue with it as always like most of the authors.
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