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❁Crimson Twilight Review Shop❁ {PAUSED/Finishing requests}When Kai reads Kim Jongin
http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/639935/when-kai-reads-kim-jongin-comedy-fangirl-school-exo-kai
About: Kai(Exo), comedy, fan, essay
Ahri
Finished 3/10/14
Title: 5/5 Perfect. It's original and relates to the story in a comedic way.
Foreword: 10/10 Simple, not very specific, and perfect for the story. Since this is a comedy and a oneshot, it's perfect. Full marks.
Plot: 20/20 It's really original. At first I thought Kai would end up meeting Jongsung, and they would fall in love or some cliché idea, but you changed my mind with the ending. That was unexpected, considering the stories on AFF. Great job with that twist! Also, great essay!
Characters: 20/20 I love how you can describe Kai and Jongsung perfectly without a lot of details. You show us what you think Kai's personality is like without really stating directly what he does. You also give us a lot of information about Jongsung without even going into specifics.
Grammar and Spelling: 19/20 You have amazing grammar except for one mistype.
1. P(aragraph)25 "He wears clothes at fit him well..." should be 'He wears clothes that fit him well...'
Enjoyment: 5/5 Great plot and characters! This is really good.
Structure: 5/5 Personally, I find the font a bit hard to read since it's spaced out, but this is probably only me. Everything is neat and organized. Great job.
Overall: 84/85=99 You have perfect grammar, a great plot, and well-described characters. The twist at the end also helped the story a lot. This is very well-written.
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