STORY REVIEW

 

Title: Frenemies in Love 

Author: Blackpearl23

Reviewed by: AnExoticShawol

 

 

Title:  4/5

From the first glance, your title gives off a feeling of romcom or fluff. But for me, it isn’t eye-catching enough. But plus points because it somehow makes sense in the story.

 

 

 

Graphic/Poster: 3/5

I really am confused with the poster. There is a conflict between the different  spellings of the title. The fanfic title says “Frenemies” but on the poster, it is “Frienemies”. You should have requested for a redo or something.

 

 

 

Foreword/Description: 10/15

You tend to misuse punctuation.

“''I love you too'' Kai replied…”

You should’ve added a period before closing the dialogue. It should be:

““I love you too.” Kai replied…”

 

Also, note the run-on sentences and sentence fragments that you make.

“Kwon Yuri and Im Yoona are bestfriends since childhood, they moved to America for 3 years and moved back to Korea because their parents missed them and convinced them to return after graduation.”

You could say:

“Kwon Yuri and Im Yoona are best friends since childhood. They lived in America for 3 years and moved back to Korea because their parents missed them.”

 

Add a space between the comma and the next word.

“Making friends, getting in trouble, having fights…”

 

Take note of the verb tenses too. Instead of:

“That was one of the best and worst desicions they have ever made.”

Change it to:

“That was one of the best and worst decisions that they had ever made.”

 

The transition between each character profile also seems to be a bit off. A little organization will do.

 

 

 

Characterization: 7 /10

I like how each character is different with another character. They stand out in different colors. Anyway, I didn’t like that minor characters were introduced all at once. Take for instance, f(x) in Chapter 8. Add Daehyun, Chorong, and Seohyun to the list of people that