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TITLE: What Happen If EXO's Members Have Twitter Accounts?

AUTHOR: PastelClover

REVIEWER: PancakeJune

 

 

 

Title: 4/5
I thought your title was really amusing. I can clearly tell from the title that your story will be quite funny and it's also original from what I could tell! My only problem is that the title doesn't really make sense?

"What Happen If EXO's Members Have Twitter Accounts?"

You should probably write 'happens' or if you wanted, use 'happened'.
Other than that, the story title is fine!

 

 

 

Graphic/Poster: 5/5
I really liked your graphics and posters! They're really fun and playful which fits in with your story.

 

 

 

Foreword/Description: 13/15
I personally like your description because the scenarios are rather entertaining. There are some minor details I have to point out:

"Will Tao hates Gucci?"

The extra 's' on the end of 'hates' doesn't work. So here's the edit:

"Will Tao hate Gucci?"

You do that again with the sentence after:

"Will Kris becomes 155cm tall?"

It should be:

"Will Kris become 155cm tall?"

Also you have:

"Will Twitter's server crashed and shut down?"

It should be:

"Will Twitter's server crash and shut down?"

With the foreword, there aren't any problems except from 'plagiarized' which should have been 'plagiarize'.