TITLE: I Got Married with EXO's Maknae??

AUTHOR: princes101

MAIN CHARACTERS: Oh Sehun & Kim Sora (OC). 

GENRE: fluff, romance

SYNOPSIS: JYP Entertainment’s rookie girl group Royals immediately gain popularity and fans because of their looks and talents. Kim Sora the maknae of Royals is also known as the angelic maknae but turns into a badass dancer in stage for her amazing dance moves. She is also the younger sister of Girls Generation’s Hyoyeon. What if Sora got chosen for the next season of We Got Married: Maknae Edition together with EXO’s maknae Oh Sehun of SM Entertainment? With their protective and supportive members, shippers, bashers, and a past lover what will happen to Sora and Sehun? Will love bloom?

STATUS: Chaptered, on-going

REVIEWED BY: YunaBaebae

 

 

 

 

TITLE.

The title definitely did not catch my eye. It is too monotonous and lack in variety, in other words, repetitious and if you search up that title, you would have found many other stories with the same title as yours. To look for other more applicable titles, I would recommend you this site:

http://www.theperfecttitle.com/love/Love.shtml

But if you would still want to use your contemporary title, let me give you some corrections and tips in your current title.

 

Your title: I got married with EXO's maknae??

Correction: I Got Married To EXO’s Maknae?

 

Now, let me tell you the reason in your corrections in the title. According to the English rules, it is better to to say ‘Get married TO’ than to say ‘Get married WITH’. Why? Because, the character is getting married TO someone and not WITH someone. There is a difference ^^

Next, it would look more efficient if you used all capital letters on each first word of the title and it is better to use one question mark in my opinion.

 

 

 

APPEARANCE (GRAPHIC/POSTER).

The poster looks very inviting and I especially love love the flowers blended in the background. The font is very charming too. But in my own opinion, I suggest for some wedding rings or a little more entertaining colours in the poster. The layout is very neat and tidy too! I like how you put some simple but lovely banner in between the paragraphs in your foreword and description boxes. But for the first chapter, may I know why is the upper part of the story with larger font than the lower part of the story? I think it’s best if you make all the font the same size so that the readers could read the story more comfortably.

 

 

 

FOREWORD/DESCRIPTION.

Your description is fine but in your last sentence, ‘Will love bloom?’ I think that is better to put in the word ‘between the two?’ to signify that the love between Sora and Sehu