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TITLE: One Last Thing

AUTHOR: ChilyPepper

REVIEWER: GinaLy

Title: 4/5
The title evokes a feeling of nostalgia and melancholy, and it fits with the main message of the story. But I still feel that it could have been better, because the word "thing" isn't really eloquent enough and it's pretty vague.

Graphic and Poster: 4/5
It's very pretty and it suits the nostalgic feel of the story. I love the yellow leaves on the ground.

Foreword and description: 13/15
I like how you inserted a meaningful quote in the foreword and didn't reveal too much of the characters, but there was an error.

"Faith drifted them apart." Faith is what holds them together; what you meant to say was "fate". "Fate separated them from each other" is what you meant.

Characterization: 5/10
I feel that the characters aren't very developed. There was no background, no actions that significantly prove the character's personality, no events to evoke personality, and simply I feel that the characters were flat.

They don't have that "wow" factor nor anything that can draw the readers in. In my opinion, you should work more on the background of the characters as well as make their inner thou