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TITLE: The Mysterious Guy

AUTHOR: ShinJinYoong

REVIEWER: Diviana

Title:  4.5/5

The title isn't bad but it is not very eye catching. It does however it does make me curious about the mentioned guy.

Graphic/Poster: 4.5/5 

The poster matches the tone of your oneshot, but it reveals who the "mysterious" guy is. That takes away the part of the mystery. I like how the rain in the background foreshadows Hyerin’s lost.

Foreword/Description: 10/15

Your description is very interesting. However, having your ending be your description is a very risky move:

"'Who are you?" My whole world came crumbling down upon hearing that.'".

It rarely works out unless a lot of careful planning is done to make one sympathize with the characters to nearly the level of empathy. The way you did it made the story feel incomplete since it felt like the oneshot should address the aftermath of his amnesia in more depth. Or it should have implied her attraction to him earlier on.

 Characterization: 3/10

Hyerin and Kai are relatively flat, static characters even for a oneshot. Hyerin starts off as a opinionated girl but her personality disappears after that scene in the oneshot. It did not make enough of