Title: Untimely

Author: ayxngz49710

Main Characters: Fu MeiXiang & Zhang Yixing.

Genre: romance, angst, historical au

Synopsis/Description: Pregnant woman, escapes her in-laws home after her husband's untimely demise and heads for Wusheng mountain on a secret quest. On her way, she meets a man who looks like he wants her help her, but he has his own motives.

Reviewed By: Myst_Dance

Title:

At one point, I understand how this title is related to the story. For me, when both characters are still waiting for each other and are looking for each other, yet they have a lot of conflicts and difficulties in their lives. For that reason, it makes the characters feel really realistic because what Yixing and the main character went through. There is also that time that for lives between Yixing and MeiXiang for they have to fight for their lives from the royals.

Appearance (Graphic/Poster):

I like the color of your theme, and it matches perfectly well with historical stories. Although, maybe try adding some traditional clothes or traditional firecracker or something that represent Chinese times.

And maybe your background of the poster should be like temples or old villages. What you have known is perfectly okay, but it is just better if you can put something that represents the Chinese tradition.

Foreword/Description:

Your forward was a starting point to your story. You gave off the summary in a good time measure. It wasn’t long nor was it too short; it was the perfect length. I also like your choice of words; you didn’t use those cliché words that people use like ‘simple words’ or ‘too easy for the story’ type of thing. You use ‘demise’, ‘scheming’, and ‘venturing’.

What you did shows a lot of professional in your writing styles and it kind indicate that you know what you’re talking about and is really organized.

Characterization:

MeiXiang: At first, I thought she was those girls who can’t fight and lets everyone step over her. Her personality does not really match her actions and the way she talks. It is too modern when she speaks. I was not sure if you let your characters be modern or ancient times speaking. Not only that, at the beginning, she does sound like those weak girls which can