TITLE: All Of Me

AUTHOR: HizBubbleT

MAIN CHARACTERS: OC, Jimin and Chanyeol

SYNOPSIS: Although running away from home solved my problem temporarily, I still had to face it because there was no such thing as running forever. My ‘problem’ was my brother, half-brother to be exact. But now I have bigger ‘problems’. I got thrown in to a place where all the hearts were bleeding, everyone was suffering, eyes were crying and yet, no one showing it but I saw it. Out of all the people, why did it had to be me who cut her feet from the pieces of the broken hearts? Out of all the people, why did it had to be me who got targeted by him? He, who made my high school life a hell just to torture someone else.

STUATUS: Chaptered, On-going

REVIEWED BY: charmingusta

 

 

 

 

 

TITLE.

 

Since the story has not progressed much, I cannot offer you my opinion on its relevance to the plot or how much it influences the actual story; rather, I would like to tell you about my very first impression of the title itself. All of Me is an extremely popular romantic song by John Legend, and just from the title alone, I do expect to read about dreamy romance and everything related to love in general. However, it surprises me when I read the description and foreward since those sentences do not seem to give off this vibe at all. Hence, at this point, I really anticipate learning about the direction All of Me will take as well as exploring the depth behind this title you have chosen. Good luck!

 

 

APPEARANCE (GRAPHIC/POSTER).

 

I absolutely love the poster! The coloring, the picture choices, and the fact that there is a picture of Taehyung's jumping off in the prologue video makes everything even better if the intention is to convey the theme angst. I also wonder if there is any connection of that particular part to the storyline.

 

 

 

 

FOREWORD/DESCRIPTION.

 

 

Description:

Reading the first two sentences, I have this thought that the main focus of the story would be repairing that seemingly damage relationship between the protagonist and her brother. Then, there is this abrupt turn of event as the protagonist tells me that now she actually has 'bigger' problems. To be honest—and I am saying this as a reader who has only read two chapters—it seems to me that one of the main ideas of the story is actually the protagonist going through and handling all the obstacles she encounters at that certain new place. Therefore, I recommend starting the description with "I got thrown into…" instead if it truly is the main focus of All of Me. However, I could be completely wrong about this whole assumption, so again I am excited to find out about that connection between her brother and all the troubles in that place. Otherwise, I personally think the first few sentences about her brother in the description are not necessary since they disrupt the flow of the reading.

 

Foreword: first of all, I personally find the list of music that you have given really interesting since I believe those songs serve to tell the readers certain parts of the story as well just like OSTs do. Second of all, it is great that you have written a preview (?) because it gives the readers a quick sneak peek to All of Me. From that preview, everything seems so tight and tense, and it really gives off this mysteriousness and slightly disturbing feel of angst and drama which do not spoil the plot at all. Reading that really raises my expectation for All of Me, and that is absolutely a great way to make the readers click the subscribe or next button. Good job with that!

 

 

 

 

CHARACTERISATION.

 

I will only comment on the characterization of Taehee and Taehyung since so far, they are the only ones with considerable amount of information for me to analyze.

Kim Taehee:

Chapter 1:

Since I find out from the start that Taehee used to run away from home for a year, my very first impression of her is that she seems to be a rebellious teenager who lives quite a troubled life. On the contrary, the fact that someone whom I think to be rebellious does accept her aunt's persuasion to go back home makes me all the more curious about her decisions because there is a chance that Taehee is not as what she seems to be from the outside. Therefore, in the future chapters, it will be fantastic if I get to know more about her past and her thoughts during the time she spent away from home because I believe that during a dark point in our life, we all tend to make truly life-changing choices—either for the better or for the worse—which say a lot about us as an individual.

In the next part, interestingly, she reveals that despite his harsh words, Taehee does not hate Taehyung, and it is just that he always manages to bring out the worst in her which in return, makes her spit back a