Aphelion
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Title (4/5)
My vocabulary isn't wide, there're still lots of words I never know, and I'm sure most of AFF's users have almost the same condition like me. So when I saw the title, I was like... speechless. But my mind is saying a lot of things. You know, there's just that small voice inside you that talk to you. So, I searched for what does Aphelion actually means (i'm a fool, i mean, you've wrote it on your forewordXD). Okay, so i searched and read the story and i have to agree, the title unexpectedly is related very much with the story. So, high points for that because there're not a lot of stories with titles that go well with the plots and all :)
Graphics (5/5)
Very simple yet meaningful. 'Path to Polaris'... I'm loving it very much! I love how a simple sentence can mean so much to those who view the poster. Plus, the galaxy theme! The previous poster is great too! Good choice of graphic designer(s)!
Description and Foreword: (10/10)
I never want to sugarcoat you or anything but it's freaking wonderful, the description, I mean. 'Losing yourself to find the way'. It shows how you are someone who think out off the box. You let people wonder, and wondering is a great thing. It makes you take a moment and think. And I'm sure that even readers who don't understand the description or foreword will be trapped into the story eventually. It's mysterious and meaningful.
Story Layout: (5/5)
Everything's fine. I'm fine with everything. Since I'm not the type to try damn hard to search for your mistakes. As long as I'm comfortable with it. And I'm comfortable with your story layout. c; 'so we wished on falling angels' The chapters' name make me <3... :)
Plot: (30/30)
What can I say? Umm... strong. Yep, very strong. It's indescribable. The es, what the characters are talking about, what are they thinking about, you... developed them excellently. It's... very great. I don't know how to say it anymore. Every scenes, every chapters are meaningful. Everything is memorable and powerful. I love Luhan's poems, especially the last one; Every breath is a cliffhanger. It's a weird combination and I don't know what it actually means, but I can feel that it is yeah, strong. Like, it's just a sentence with five words, but there's like thousands of images and words playing in my mind. So...high scores, I mean, full marks.
Characterization: (10/10)
Yixing is the dreamer. Luhan follows his friends, but he doesn't know what's he's doing, and Yifan is the lost teenager, the one who's lost inside himself. Every three of them have their own stories, and it's complicated, but I love each of them. Including Tao. He's like; the hero? Knight shining in amour? He's not the other character, he is actually one of the mains, but he is not quite the main. That's what I see on them. Their personalities are troubles but there're something special. There's always that something.
Content Description (9/10)
I was having troubles at some sudden change of scenes and I have to read everything again before understanding it. It may be just my mistake anyway. :3 But other than that, it's fine. I actually don't know how does this 'content description' work XDXD
Flow: (5/5)
To be honest, there's no flow, right? Everything just work like how they're supposed to be. There's no flow, because its just their stories. And I do love the flow, even though there's no exact flow. I hope you understand what I mean c:
Grammar: (9/10)
I thought the grammar and vocabulary usage would be wide in your story but nah. Everything's alright. However, I wish you can make it more simple. It's fine now, but some readers may thought the words are hard to understand so maybe, fix it, just a tiny bit? And I spot no spelling mistakes.
Taste of the Story: (9/10)
I thought this story would be the mainly , like, the extreme one so I was thinking twice before starting to read it. But gladly, there're just few scenes (was it two or one?) and every scenes are written for a reason. Like; it's not just a plain , it's quite meaningful and add a lot to the whole story. I love you and the story. It's incredible. THANK YOU. YOU PULLED ME TO THIS STORY AND I NEVER GONNA REGRET IT. *view fefedove's other fan fictions* *click*
TOTAL: (96/100)
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