Love is a Beautiful Thing

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love is a beautiful thing
Baekhyun and Kyungsoo love each other. Although they really enjoy denying it. Well, at least Baekhyun does.
 
 
 
reviewed by: dahliaa
 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 
 
Title (3/5)
Let me tell you a story. On a sunny day, I was sitting in front of my laptop and I scrolled down the 'baeksoo' tag, then I saw the story, your story and honestly, I am not going to click on it. Okay, okay, Love is a Beautiful Thing is a nice and romantic title, but it's not quite interesting. How about changing it to something a bit more eye catching? But I did give you points because 'baeksoo's love is a beautiful thing' XD
 
Graphics (0/5)
Because there are no graphics for this story, full marks cannot be rewarded. 
 
Description and Foreword: (7/10)
The description is quite amusing. I can sense the 'humor aura' going around this fan fiction. It was simple, but it gives me a lot of feeling and I love authors who write short length sentences, yet can make us feel lots of things. (?) The foreword, what Umeda sensei said was inspiring, (well, at least to me). Though the dialogues are not needed at all, but if you really read through it, you will eventually find that little message you are trying to give us. Well, if you meant it that way. 
 
Story Layout: (4/5)
There's not much going on in the story layout. You don't have any special fonts or colors but it is alright. It's a short length story after all. I guess the story layout is fine. 
 
Plot: (22/30)
The plot is something I'm kinda confused of. I know how you deliver everything well, judging by the comments. I understand how Kyungsoo moved to his mother who has lots of things going on. I understand how Kyungsoo confessed before Baekhyun did. But that is all. After reading all of the chapters, I know what is going on, but I didn't feel satisfied by it. I felt like there's something I'm missing. (Mind explaining? :)) It may be just my mistake for not running my eyes to every single sentences in it. Tell me if I'm wrong. But overall, the plot is common, but yeah.. it's a nice story. 
 
Characterization: (10/10)
It's a six length chapters, and I understand every characters well. Good job! 
 
Content Description (9/10)
The places, the times, you did a great job again :)))
 
Flow: (3/5)
However, the flow, I'm not liking it so much. I don't quite feel the feelings involve around Baekhyun and Kyungsoo. Kyungsoo returned and he met Baekhyun, and I was having high expectation about how are they going to react, I mean, what will happen when they met again but... i'm sorry but I don't quite like the feeling of feeling nothing. Of course, there's process, but their encounters, all of it are moments and I was having a big hope on those... :') But honestly, the flow is fine. 
 
Grammar: (5/10)
I'm confused again. I don't quite know what tense are you using. Past or present. These have to be fixed. I suggest you to hire a beta reader. It will be very helpful. Because there're times when it's a past tense, but then it changes into present. I hope you can fix it :) But spelling mistake is a no-no and your vocabulary is wide but simple and easy to understand which is really good. 
 
Taste of the Story: (8/10)
The story is damn good. The last conversation got me screams. 'You.' And I was like *faint* I've thought of stopping in chapter 2 but then I saw the comments of your readers squealing about the define love for me or something like that and that has caught my interest again. Overall, very nice and fluffy yet still angsty. Thumbs up!!! Just... remember, the grammar. :) 
 


TOTAL: (71/100)

 

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NeverNinaa
#1
Chapter 110: Hello there! I saw that your shop is accepting requests and I was wondering how can I drop a request? I'm sorry, i'm using my phone right now and i can't seem to catch the request form anywhere XD could you please guide me?
sweetcandy65
#2
I love reading your reviews in this archive because not only your reviews were interesting, it also helped me with my own mistakes! Thank goodness you made this archive ♡
JESLEN #3
Chapter 75: 5/5
Thank you for your content description. I never realized that car scene before lol. But thank you for that. You’re right about the thoughts and feelings by other characters should not be actually realized by the person’s POV. Guess I’m too immersed in the writing that I got carried away lol.
Im glad the flow is alright. Considering that it’s my first story (my practice 101), I wasn’t sure if my pacing was alright. I wasn’t exactly confident with the flashbacks being inserted like that but I’m happy you liked it (;
Grammar is not really my best asset, especially prepositions/conjunctions. I absolutely need to learn more. Thank you for your kind words despite.
Thank you very much for reviewing my story despite the rated scenes. I can never thank you enough for this very insightful review. Im glad you enjoyed the story despite everything. And once again, Im so sorry for the late pick up! I’ll credit now. Thank you once again and sorry for the loooonnnnnng comments :D
JESLEN #4
Chapter 75: 4/5
- gray eyes come from a thin layer of melanin on the front layer of the iris. The blue reflection of light is clouded over by the dark layer in front causing a dark gray color. (haha copied it from a med book lol)
-you’re right about her car injuries, I’ve only described her immense aches and pain after and the switching of faces, I’ve realized I focused too much on the switching that her injuries weren’t emphasized, thank you for emphasizing that
JESLEN #5
Chapter 75: 3/5
Your questions are gold! Thank you! I’ll keep them in mind while writing. Well to answer some of them:
-Changing face is actually possible, but would require lots of sessions. It’s from a theory and no, it isn’t practiced. *hint* from the latest story update, they changed faces, but would the outcome be the same? Would it be successful this time?*hint*hint
-what caused the amnesia---will be revealed later on haha
-whether joongki can take med degrees when he’s still young...ill try to check if I missed out a detail here  haha, I thought i made that info clear before, but apparently it’s doubtful
-whether joongki is thinking about her in the café, then she appeared…well, she’s been on his mind consistently ever since she disappeared and that day wasn’t an exemption.
-about shi hoo looking at her the same way? Let’s see what will happen 
JESLEN #6
Chapter 75: 2/5
For the layout, being consistent is so hard T__T but thank you for pointing the specific flaws. I’ll get to that and correct them. Thank you!

To be honest, I’ve never watched Good Doctor although I loved both Moon Chae Won and Joo Won. All I know is that the drama is all about doctors. Anyway, I’ve thought of a plot involving switching faces and how from that, a story will be created. I’ve added arrange marriage because to be honest, I have a feels for them (that is, before AFF was supersaturated with arrange-marriage fics). From there, Ive thought of making a second male lead as a friend helping the heroine with her struggle, but I’ve thought it too dull. I never really planned on making the doctor her love interest, but after some thoughts, why not? It would be a challenge to write. This is actually my first story and I never really thought about the number of chapters. I never really planned ahead during that time. I was full of daydreams and what ifs, that I became too excited to make it a reality, a story. Looking back, I realized how “short” my chapters are since 3-5 chapters actually happened in just a day. From there, I tried to learn how to balance scenes with my other stories. I knew how tiring it must be to read a long story T__T but since I started Imposter this way, I have to continue with what I have and improve the balancing of scenes till the end. I’ve thought of revamping after completing, and hopefully can publish it in the future 
JESLEN #7
Chapter 75: 1/5
oh my goodness. I didnt realize my review is up, but i saw it when I played a little with google search. Im so sorry for the late pick up!
Anyway for the title, I agree that some may not find it attractive enough, but for now, you're right that I should stick with it since the end is near. I will definitely think of a more mysterious title once I’ve completed and revamped the story. For the graphics, I’m glad someone pointed out the different symbolism it held. The graphic artist definitely understood what the story is all about. I couldn’t ask for more, and we’re the same! Aside from the beauty, I appreciate an artwork more if the artist can imbed hints and important symbolisms. I understand what you’re trying to point out with the trailers. Actually, I requested trailers when the story is only starting. I only gave brief description to the video artists, without giving them the little big reveals. The trailers are actually their interpretation with what little summary I gave them.
yeolsbubbletea
#8
Chapter 77: Oh, and I'm interested about the details of my grammar mistakes. I wish to talk a bit more about it :)
yeolsbubbletea
#9
Chapter 77: Thank you for the review and sorry for the late thank you :) It's a relieve that I can make characters and the plot well, but of course it's a disappointment that reviewer-nim didn't enjoy reading my story 'that much'. Based on your building critiques, I guess I have to learn more and develop a more well established story that can leave a very good taste of the story. It makes me reflect a lot on my own story and reminds me that I still have a lot to improve.
I hope everything will go well for this review shop. Have a nice day! :)