{1개의 춤 (ONE DANCE) by YuukiHikari}

Story Title (4/5)

I felt as the title was really meaningful and captured the essence of the entire story. It was a bit unclear for me at the beginning and didn't give me the idea that this story would be an angst-filled one, and to better it, I would've added in adjective such as 'final' or 'memorable'. It gives the reader some warning of what to expect and will build more suspense for the story. I liked that you used Korean to write the title and then translated it to English. I can't read the Korean, but it gives off a very sophisticated vibe. 

Graphics (3/5)

Again, I am very awkward with graphics since I am not a graphics designer nor am I a proud graphics reviewer. Please do not take this section into consideration if you disagree with me in any way. 

I liked the dark colors being used in the poster and the two main characters are very obvious, with no unneccessary clutter in the space around them. I didn't see much correlation of dancing to the poster or anything even remotely tragic about it so that was a few points docked off. Other than that, I really liked the clear image that gave a nice start into the story.

Description and Foreword (9/10)

Your description was short, vague, and very alluring. I was drawn to it by the quotes you used and I wanted to find out more about the story after reading it. Everything was so saddening that it was hard to not click the "next" button to read forwards. I don't have much to say in terms of your description since the length is good for the one-shot, the emotions were all there, and the quotes were beautifully written. I was definitely looking for them while reading the actual story.

{Story Plot}

Characterisation (15/20)

Taehyung - He was a well-rounded character. I'm not talking about the kind that is perfect in every single aspect (like all girls dream of), but instead the kind that portrays so much personality that you can't help but grow attracted to him. At the beginning, when he was looking around to see if he was alone from s, I felt his uneasiness and slight frustration. Even though the story was short, I felt his remorse for rejecting the dance with Jungkook, making me as the reader, even sadder than I expected to be. He pulled a lot of heartstrings and I was drawn to his character.

Jungkook - Jungkook deserves more debriefing as a character. I want to know why he suddenly wanted to dance with his hyung, and the implied romance you said that would be present in the story was lacking. For me, I didn't find anything except a very fiery case of brotherly love, more friendship than romance. Jungkook and Taehyung seem very close, so I was hoping to see how much they value each other. It would have been nice to see Jungkook's POV before and after the tragic incident, but I do realize that it would've screwed around with the flow and consistency of the story. 

As for the other characters, I didn't see much of them throughout the story so I don't see the need to talk much about them. However, since I"m not sure about when this took place (as in time period), I would've liked to have some more background information about the band and the members inside.

Originality (10/10)

This was very original. It kept me hooked from the first word to the 3242 word. Really, there isn't much to say about this story since it was such a refresher for me. Everything was kept simple and realistic - no cliche moments to ruin it for me. You've done very well, so no complaints here.

Flow (4/5)

Other than the fact that it took me some time to figure out the time changes, your story was, as I said before, consistent and realistic. The scenes may have not been in chronological order (and confused me in the middle of the reading process), everything seemed to fit into place after I took the time to re-read the scene where Jungkook and Taehyung made the promise to dance with each other. Everything pleayed out so smoothly when the reader just takes the time to go word by word and just appreciate the content.

Conflict twists (9/10)

Really, there wasn't that many conflict twists that stood out to me and I felt as if this is a somewhat tragic story that didn't actually require much conflict twists as the story itself was already a conflict to start off with. 

Content Descriptiveness (8/10) 

Simply put, the emotion was there and the imagery was all there. The only advice I'd be able to give is to lengthen or stress some more of the hurt that the main character is feeling since a lot of the story revolves around that. I want to see the cause and effect of the result of a fire.  

Grammar (15/15)

 I'm not one who is overly critical of grammar and such. Since it was such a pleasurable read, I actually found myself forgetting to pay attention to structure and punctuation. I had to go back to specifically search for major mistakes and I'll say it was a waste of time. Your grammar is great!

Taste of the Story (10/10)

 It was filled with sadness and moments of our main character reminiscing about his past and promises. I loved, loved, loved this story. It really gives off the essence of a angsty story. 

I'd like to apologize for taking this long for this review of yours. I'm honestly, sincerely apologetic! I hope ot was helpful and met even the least of your expectations. Again, I am really, really sorry for taking such a long amount of time!

Score: 87/100

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