5 Advantages of Dating a Policeman

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5 Advantages of dating a a policeman
 
Being a policeman has a huge impact on the story, because as it is said, the story tells 5 advantages of dating a policeman.
 
 
reviewed by: chubbybaek

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 
Title (2.5/5)
I am kinda disappointed with the title. It is very long, ineffective and uncool. It doesn't attract readers to read more of it. It was better if it could be like 'The Perks of Dating a Policeman'. They are both long, but the latter looks rather title-like than the original one. The way you wrote the title is basically like you're writing an essay or a tutorial. 
 
Graphics (5/5)
The graphic literally blows me away. It is so awesome and has that comedy aura just by looking at it. I have nothing to say because it indeed looks so cool! 
 
Description and Foreword: (8/10)
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That simple description is such a turn-on for everyone. With that 'Is Luhan a bad or good cop?', everyone knows exactly what this story mostly contains of. Yes, , , , and . Though it's really plain, but I guess it won't be risky, cause it's just a one-shot. No? 
 
Story Layout: (3/5)
I strongly suggest you edit it some more. The description should be more organized. But aside from all of that, the chapters are all enjoyable to read.
 
Plot: (27/30)
For me, this story doesn't have a clear plot. I'm not really sure of what you meant, what the main plot is. Is it about the gang thing or is it only about the ? From my point of view or maybe everybody else's, it must be the . Why? Readers who are fond of tend not to really care about anything as long as there are scenes and just go with the flow. 
I love the jokes you made there. I cracked up at every single one of them. Not really the best comedy story I've read, but it's really hilarious. I can't stop laughing at Lay and Luhan's dumb conversations and actions. Both Luhan and Aerin's interactions were also cute and funny. 
 
Characterization: (9/10)
Luhan is such a lovely boyfriend. He's funny and has a very good sense of humor. Despite his dirty mind and selfishness wanting them to be alone, he seems shy when he is with Aerin. She is the one who always initiates it, am I right? Or not? I envy Luhan and Aerin's relationship. They were romantic but sometimes childish. They care for each other and love each other so much. That kind of relationship is what everyone aims for. But then, the reality .
 
Lay.... is he really dumb or is he dumb? He's so crazy and hilarious at the same time haha! 

Content Description (8/10)
There is no problem of interpreting the story. The words you used were easily understood although there were some scenes that were pretty confusing. Are you perhaps a newbie of writing ? Your didn't give any feeling of being . It didn't increase readers' ual desires either. It was like I'm reading Biology. It wasn't so bad, but it still lacked of the feeling.
 
Flow: (5/5)
The story is like occuring in our daily life, without so many dramas and all. This story doesn't have any drama so I guess the flow is fine.
 
Grammar: (10/10)
There were only some minor mistakes such as typos. Beside that, I didn't find any grammar errors.
 
Taste of the Story: (8.5/10)
Your story is the first action comedy fiction that i've read. It literally refreshed my mind. I can't say I don't like it because your story is indeed awesome and hilarious. Each of their conversations always crack me up. But overall, you did a great job! 
 
I'm terribly sorry if I offend you or being so harsh on you, I'm just speaking out my mind. Keep writing! (P.s. you're so good at writing comedy fics) ;) 
 


TOTAL: (85/100)

 

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NeverNinaa
#1
Chapter 110: Hello there! I saw that your shop is accepting requests and I was wondering how can I drop a request? I'm sorry, i'm using my phone right now and i can't seem to catch the request form anywhere XD could you please guide me?
sweetcandy65
#2
I love reading your reviews in this archive because not only your reviews were interesting, it also helped me with my own mistakes! Thank goodness you made this archive ♡
JESLEN #3
Chapter 75: 5/5
Thank you for your content description. I never realized that car scene before lol. But thank you for that. You’re right about the thoughts and feelings by other characters should not be actually realized by the person’s POV. Guess I’m too immersed in the writing that I got carried away lol.
Im glad the flow is alright. Considering that it’s my first story (my practice 101), I wasn’t sure if my pacing was alright. I wasn’t exactly confident with the flashbacks being inserted like that but I’m happy you liked it (;
Grammar is not really my best asset, especially prepositions/conjunctions. I absolutely need to learn more. Thank you for your kind words despite.
Thank you very much for reviewing my story despite the rated scenes. I can never thank you enough for this very insightful review. Im glad you enjoyed the story despite everything. And once again, Im so sorry for the late pick up! I’ll credit now. Thank you once again and sorry for the loooonnnnnng comments :D
JESLEN #4
Chapter 75: 4/5
- gray eyes come from a thin layer of melanin on the front layer of the iris. The blue reflection of light is clouded over by the dark layer in front causing a dark gray color. (haha copied it from a med book lol)
-you’re right about her car injuries, I’ve only described her immense aches and pain after and the switching of faces, I’ve realized I focused too much on the switching that her injuries weren’t emphasized, thank you for emphasizing that
JESLEN #5
Chapter 75: 3/5
Your questions are gold! Thank you! I’ll keep them in mind while writing. Well to answer some of them:
-Changing face is actually possible, but would require lots of sessions. It’s from a theory and no, it isn’t practiced. *hint* from the latest story update, they changed faces, but would the outcome be the same? Would it be successful this time?*hint*hint
-what caused the amnesia---will be revealed later on haha
-whether joongki can take med degrees when he’s still young...ill try to check if I missed out a detail here  haha, I thought i made that info clear before, but apparently it’s doubtful
-whether joongki is thinking about her in the café, then she appeared…well, she’s been on his mind consistently ever since she disappeared and that day wasn’t an exemption.
-about shi hoo looking at her the same way? Let’s see what will happen 
JESLEN #6
Chapter 75: 2/5
For the layout, being consistent is so hard T__T but thank you for pointing the specific flaws. I’ll get to that and correct them. Thank you!

To be honest, I’ve never watched Good Doctor although I loved both Moon Chae Won and Joo Won. All I know is that the drama is all about doctors. Anyway, I’ve thought of a plot involving switching faces and how from that, a story will be created. I’ve added arrange marriage because to be honest, I have a feels for them (that is, before AFF was supersaturated with arrange-marriage fics). From there, Ive thought of making a second male lead as a friend helping the heroine with her struggle, but I’ve thought it too dull. I never really planned on making the doctor her love interest, but after some thoughts, why not? It would be a challenge to write. This is actually my first story and I never really thought about the number of chapters. I never really planned ahead during that time. I was full of daydreams and what ifs, that I became too excited to make it a reality, a story. Looking back, I realized how “short” my chapters are since 3-5 chapters actually happened in just a day. From there, I tried to learn how to balance scenes with my other stories. I knew how tiring it must be to read a long story T__T but since I started Imposter this way, I have to continue with what I have and improve the balancing of scenes till the end. I’ve thought of revamping after completing, and hopefully can publish it in the future 
JESLEN #7
Chapter 75: 1/5
oh my goodness. I didnt realize my review is up, but i saw it when I played a little with google search. Im so sorry for the late pick up!
Anyway for the title, I agree that some may not find it attractive enough, but for now, you're right that I should stick with it since the end is near. I will definitely think of a more mysterious title once I’ve completed and revamped the story. For the graphics, I’m glad someone pointed out the different symbolism it held. The graphic artist definitely understood what the story is all about. I couldn’t ask for more, and we’re the same! Aside from the beauty, I appreciate an artwork more if the artist can imbed hints and important symbolisms. I understand what you’re trying to point out with the trailers. Actually, I requested trailers when the story is only starting. I only gave brief description to the video artists, without giving them the little big reveals. The trailers are actually their interpretation with what little summary I gave them.
yeolsbubbletea
#8
Chapter 77: Oh, and I'm interested about the details of my grammar mistakes. I wish to talk a bit more about it :)
yeolsbubbletea
#9
Chapter 77: Thank you for the review and sorry for the late thank you :) It's a relieve that I can make characters and the plot well, but of course it's a disappointment that reviewer-nim didn't enjoy reading my story 'that much'. Based on your building critiques, I guess I have to learn more and develop a more well established story that can leave a very good taste of the story. It makes me reflect a lot on my own story and reminds me that I still have a lot to improve.
I hope everything will go well for this review shop. Have a nice day! :)