The IT Hunter

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the it hunter
 
Hunter #14 is send to hunt down a creature called IT that was responsible for over 40 deaths in the past two years.
 
 
reviewed by: anyavadar

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 
 
Title (5/5)
I think me and you both knew this was going to get a 5/5, it is like the best title ever! I was seriously compelled to read this because of it!
 I actually wanted to read this before I had to review it but with all my asianfanfics work, writing my stories, and reading other fanfics I had to put it on the backburner. 
When I found out I had to review it, I got so excited! The title gave me all that excitement. You should get a reward or something!
 
Graphics (3/5)
As awesome as the poster is, there is no background nor is the foreword/description decorated. You should add these things just to give the story more appeal.
It just feels like it’s missing something. You have that amazing poster then everything else is so bland, even if you just make the background black, it would help a lot.
 
Description and Foreword: (10/10)
Please teach me o’ wise one! You’re description and foreword just pull the reader in, how do you do it?! SORCERY! No matter how hard I try, I can never get my description/foreword right!
You added some extra points with that trailer! I hated you the moment I heard Paramore start playing, I’m a er for anything that has to do with them. Plus, you chose one of my most favorite songs! 
Ok, but now on to the actual trailer itself, I felt like I was watching a movie clip. Whoever made your trailer is so amazing! I really wanted to read the story once I watched the trailer . . . twice.
 
Story Layout: (4/5)
The layout was good, bravo! 
I’m usually much more mean when giving reviews, I swear you’re a witch good writer!
 
Plot: (25/30)
The plot was priceless. Top notch, you didn’t fail my expectations, I thought it was going to be good and it was great! Everything was perfect, how you explained the different monsters, why she was a hunter, and how she got to hunting ‘IT.’
 
Characterization: (8/10)
Once again, great job! You gave each character personality. That’s saying a lot when you have ocs and all of EXO! I could totally connect with each character and imagine them perfectly; you are very good at writing detail.

Content Description (8/10)
You explained everything well, the setting, characters, and back stories. I could imagine the whole story like it was a movie.
 
Flow: (4/5)
I didn’t have to stop and re-read things. It was a smooth read where I could just relax and read, not having to correct everything I see! 
 
Grammar: (10/10)
Your grammar was awesome! It was really perfect if you knew the things I’ve had to review so far!
 Like I said before it was a nice break not having to say, that’s wrong, rewrite, do you even know English?!
You need to help me with my grammar and I’m the reviewer! Great job! I can tell you’re very smart!
 
Taste of the Story: (10/10)
Your writing is almost flawless; I’ll be finishing the rest of the story and putting my other one on hold. I think your story should be much more popular, with all this garbage that people are reading lately. Anyways, I am having a great read! Keep up the great work; you have a future ahead of you! Hwaiting!
P.S I’ve decided you are a witch, this is the nicest review I have ever given. Also, the shortest since there really wasn’t anything to point out.
 


TOTAL: (87/100)

 

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NeverNinaa
#1
Chapter 110: Hello there! I saw that your shop is accepting requests and I was wondering how can I drop a request? I'm sorry, i'm using my phone right now and i can't seem to catch the request form anywhere XD could you please guide me?
sweetcandy65
#2
I love reading your reviews in this archive because not only your reviews were interesting, it also helped me with my own mistakes! Thank goodness you made this archive ♡
JESLEN #3
Chapter 75: 5/5
Thank you for your content description. I never realized that car scene before lol. But thank you for that. You’re right about the thoughts and feelings by other characters should not be actually realized by the person’s POV. Guess I’m too immersed in the writing that I got carried away lol.
Im glad the flow is alright. Considering that it’s my first story (my practice 101), I wasn’t sure if my pacing was alright. I wasn’t exactly confident with the flashbacks being inserted like that but I’m happy you liked it (;
Grammar is not really my best asset, especially prepositions/conjunctions. I absolutely need to learn more. Thank you for your kind words despite.
Thank you very much for reviewing my story despite the rated scenes. I can never thank you enough for this very insightful review. Im glad you enjoyed the story despite everything. And once again, Im so sorry for the late pick up! I’ll credit now. Thank you once again and sorry for the loooonnnnnng comments :D
JESLEN #4
Chapter 75: 4/5
- gray eyes come from a thin layer of melanin on the front layer of the iris. The blue reflection of light is clouded over by the dark layer in front causing a dark gray color. (haha copied it from a med book lol)
-you’re right about her car injuries, I’ve only described her immense aches and pain after and the switching of faces, I’ve realized I focused too much on the switching that her injuries weren’t emphasized, thank you for emphasizing that
JESLEN #5
Chapter 75: 3/5
Your questions are gold! Thank you! I’ll keep them in mind while writing. Well to answer some of them:
-Changing face is actually possible, but would require lots of sessions. It’s from a theory and no, it isn’t practiced. *hint* from the latest story update, they changed faces, but would the outcome be the same? Would it be successful this time?*hint*hint
-what caused the amnesia---will be revealed later on haha
-whether joongki can take med degrees when he’s still young...ill try to check if I missed out a detail here  haha, I thought i made that info clear before, but apparently it’s doubtful
-whether joongki is thinking about her in the café, then she appeared…well, she’s been on his mind consistently ever since she disappeared and that day wasn’t an exemption.
-about shi hoo looking at her the same way? Let’s see what will happen 
JESLEN #6
Chapter 75: 2/5
For the layout, being consistent is so hard T__T but thank you for pointing the specific flaws. I’ll get to that and correct them. Thank you!

To be honest, I’ve never watched Good Doctor although I loved both Moon Chae Won and Joo Won. All I know is that the drama is all about doctors. Anyway, I’ve thought of a plot involving switching faces and how from that, a story will be created. I’ve added arrange marriage because to be honest, I have a feels for them (that is, before AFF was supersaturated with arrange-marriage fics). From there, Ive thought of making a second male lead as a friend helping the heroine with her struggle, but I’ve thought it too dull. I never really planned on making the doctor her love interest, but after some thoughts, why not? It would be a challenge to write. This is actually my first story and I never really thought about the number of chapters. I never really planned ahead during that time. I was full of daydreams and what ifs, that I became too excited to make it a reality, a story. Looking back, I realized how “short” my chapters are since 3-5 chapters actually happened in just a day. From there, I tried to learn how to balance scenes with my other stories. I knew how tiring it must be to read a long story T__T but since I started Imposter this way, I have to continue with what I have and improve the balancing of scenes till the end. I’ve thought of revamping after completing, and hopefully can publish it in the future 
JESLEN #7
Chapter 75: 1/5
oh my goodness. I didnt realize my review is up, but i saw it when I played a little with google search. Im so sorry for the late pick up!
Anyway for the title, I agree that some may not find it attractive enough, but for now, you're right that I should stick with it since the end is near. I will definitely think of a more mysterious title once I’ve completed and revamped the story. For the graphics, I’m glad someone pointed out the different symbolism it held. The graphic artist definitely understood what the story is all about. I couldn’t ask for more, and we’re the same! Aside from the beauty, I appreciate an artwork more if the artist can imbed hints and important symbolisms. I understand what you’re trying to point out with the trailers. Actually, I requested trailers when the story is only starting. I only gave brief description to the video artists, without giving them the little big reveals. The trailers are actually their interpretation with what little summary I gave them.
yeolsbubbletea
#8
Chapter 77: Oh, and I'm interested about the details of my grammar mistakes. I wish to talk a bit more about it :)
yeolsbubbletea
#9
Chapter 77: Thank you for the review and sorry for the late thank you :) It's a relieve that I can make characters and the plot well, but of course it's a disappointment that reviewer-nim didn't enjoy reading my story 'that much'. Based on your building critiques, I guess I have to learn more and develop a more well established story that can leave a very good taste of the story. It makes me reflect a lot on my own story and reminds me that I still have a lot to improve.
I hope everything will go well for this review shop. Have a nice day! :)