Integrity & Borders

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integrity & borders
 
After foolishly mixing business with pleasure, a group of young conglomerate CEOs end up fighting more than what they bargained for in the hopes of saving their respective family companies.
 
 
reviewed by: chubbybaek

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Title (3/5)
I like how you made the both words complete each other. Integrity means the state of being complete or whole and borders means a boundary between places. That simple title is like telling us a life lesson; you can expect something to be perfectly perfect, but there's always an obstacle to make that happen. Every reader is fond of unique title and you have that!
 
Graphics (5/5)
The black and white colors were really classic, but I think it still lacked of something. It doesn't look very appealing, but they say don't judge a book by its cover, eh?
 
Description and Foreword: (9/10)
The description was simple and very well written, you didn't write a little synopsis of what the story was about but with the explanations of the characters' personalities, I was pumped up and thought, "Maybe this is not bad." 

Putting your story's feedbacks on the foreword had a really great advantage, especially when you had so many good feedbacks from the reviewers. It helps unsure readers to keep away from clicking the back button. 

Honestly, I really like how you made everything in black and white! It was really classy and fit the business theme.
 

Story Layout: (4.5/5)
Actually, everything is really well organized. The paragraphs weren't messy but neat. The only flaw it had was that the font was too small. I had a bad eyesight so I had to zoom in to read it and that wasn't very convenient. I don't know about the others, but I was quite bothered by that so I'll cut 0.5 from 5.
 
Plot: (30/30)

You have really wide knowledge about business, I've never read something as detailed as this before. I am going to major in business enterpreneurship, but I knew nothing until I read your story. Lol. 

The whole conflict was so intensed that I found myself getting excited for no reason. I like how you integrate the drama, romance and business matters all into one. Your story is somewhat rare, you know, there aren't a lot of stories which have strong business genre.This proves that your story is just not an ordinary story with business mixed with pleasure and all that cliché hate-turn-to-love plot. What I like the most about your story is that you didn't only write about the story but you also gave some business lessons INDIRECTLY. You or the readers might not realize that but for me, those are a real hard slap on my face. 

Another thing that you've nailed is the plot twist and the cliffhanger on the epilogue! I totally didn't expect any of this, but hey, expect the unexpected they say.
 

Characterization: (9/10)
The characters' development was perfect, they weren't out of characters. But this question in my head has bothered me though. Why had Kris had already developed a strong feeling of love for Joohyun when they just met for like two or three times? 
 
Content Description (10/10)

The scenes and settings that I interpreted were very vivid, I had no trouble depicting them in my head. The vocabulary wasn't that hard to understand either. Good job!

 

Flow: (5/5)

The flow was perfect, you took everything step by step and didn't rush things. This made me read your story without complaining at all. Except for, "Yah, mwo-ya igeo", "what?! No!" , "ugh this bastard" XD

 
Grammar: (9.5/10)
Okay, I'm actually a grammar nazi aaaaaaand I didn't find any mistakes. There was a slight false spelling though. I think it's 'alright' instead of 'all right'. Correct me if I am wrong.
 
Taste of the Story: (10/10)

Everything is really good and honestly, I am really lost of words for what to say. You know that feeling when a story is too good and you can't express it with words anymore? Well I'm feeling it right now. Two thumbs up for you author-nim!!! :) 

I'm sorry if this review is rather short because I really don't know what to say anymore. :(
 


TOTAL: (95/100)

 

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NeverNinaa
#1
Chapter 110: Hello there! I saw that your shop is accepting requests and I was wondering how can I drop a request? I'm sorry, i'm using my phone right now and i can't seem to catch the request form anywhere XD could you please guide me?
sweetcandy65
#2
I love reading your reviews in this archive because not only your reviews were interesting, it also helped me with my own mistakes! Thank goodness you made this archive ♡
JESLEN #3
Chapter 75: 5/5
Thank you for your content description. I never realized that car scene before lol. But thank you for that. You’re right about the thoughts and feelings by other characters should not be actually realized by the person’s POV. Guess I’m too immersed in the writing that I got carried away lol.
Im glad the flow is alright. Considering that it’s my first story (my practice 101), I wasn’t sure if my pacing was alright. I wasn’t exactly confident with the flashbacks being inserted like that but I’m happy you liked it (;
Grammar is not really my best asset, especially prepositions/conjunctions. I absolutely need to learn more. Thank you for your kind words despite.
Thank you very much for reviewing my story despite the rated scenes. I can never thank you enough for this very insightful review. Im glad you enjoyed the story despite everything. And once again, Im so sorry for the late pick up! I’ll credit now. Thank you once again and sorry for the loooonnnnnng comments :D
JESLEN #4
Chapter 75: 4/5
- gray eyes come from a thin layer of melanin on the front layer of the iris. The blue reflection of light is clouded over by the dark layer in front causing a dark gray color. (haha copied it from a med book lol)
-you’re right about her car injuries, I’ve only described her immense aches and pain after and the switching of faces, I’ve realized I focused too much on the switching that her injuries weren’t emphasized, thank you for emphasizing that
JESLEN #5
Chapter 75: 3/5
Your questions are gold! Thank you! I’ll keep them in mind while writing. Well to answer some of them:
-Changing face is actually possible, but would require lots of sessions. It’s from a theory and no, it isn’t practiced. *hint* from the latest story update, they changed faces, but would the outcome be the same? Would it be successful this time?*hint*hint
-what caused the amnesia---will be revealed later on haha
-whether joongki can take med degrees when he’s still young...ill try to check if I missed out a detail here  haha, I thought i made that info clear before, but apparently it’s doubtful
-whether joongki is thinking about her in the café, then she appeared…well, she’s been on his mind consistently ever since she disappeared and that day wasn’t an exemption.
-about shi hoo looking at her the same way? Let’s see what will happen 
JESLEN #6
Chapter 75: 2/5
For the layout, being consistent is so hard T__T but thank you for pointing the specific flaws. I’ll get to that and correct them. Thank you!

To be honest, I’ve never watched Good Doctor although I loved both Moon Chae Won and Joo Won. All I know is that the drama is all about doctors. Anyway, I’ve thought of a plot involving switching faces and how from that, a story will be created. I’ve added arrange marriage because to be honest, I have a feels for them (that is, before AFF was supersaturated with arrange-marriage fics). From there, Ive thought of making a second male lead as a friend helping the heroine with her struggle, but I’ve thought it too dull. I never really planned on making the doctor her love interest, but after some thoughts, why not? It would be a challenge to write. This is actually my first story and I never really thought about the number of chapters. I never really planned ahead during that time. I was full of daydreams and what ifs, that I became too excited to make it a reality, a story. Looking back, I realized how “short” my chapters are since 3-5 chapters actually happened in just a day. From there, I tried to learn how to balance scenes with my other stories. I knew how tiring it must be to read a long story T__T but since I started Imposter this way, I have to continue with what I have and improve the balancing of scenes till the end. I’ve thought of revamping after completing, and hopefully can publish it in the future 
JESLEN #7
Chapter 75: 1/5
oh my goodness. I didnt realize my review is up, but i saw it when I played a little with google search. Im so sorry for the late pick up!
Anyway for the title, I agree that some may not find it attractive enough, but for now, you're right that I should stick with it since the end is near. I will definitely think of a more mysterious title once I’ve completed and revamped the story. For the graphics, I’m glad someone pointed out the different symbolism it held. The graphic artist definitely understood what the story is all about. I couldn’t ask for more, and we’re the same! Aside from the beauty, I appreciate an artwork more if the artist can imbed hints and important symbolisms. I understand what you’re trying to point out with the trailers. Actually, I requested trailers when the story is only starting. I only gave brief description to the video artists, without giving them the little big reveals. The trailers are actually their interpretation with what little summary I gave them.
yeolsbubbletea
#8
Chapter 77: Oh, and I'm interested about the details of my grammar mistakes. I wish to talk a bit more about it :)
yeolsbubbletea
#9
Chapter 77: Thank you for the review and sorry for the late thank you :) It's a relieve that I can make characters and the plot well, but of course it's a disappointment that reviewer-nim didn't enjoy reading my story 'that much'. Based on your building critiques, I guess I have to learn more and develop a more well established story that can leave a very good taste of the story. It makes me reflect a lot on my own story and reminds me that I still have a lot to improve.
I hope everything will go well for this review shop. Have a nice day! :)