Learning How To Love

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learning how to love
Jongin comes home one day only to find a young catboy crouching at his doorstep, wearing nothing but an overly size hoodie which reached his milky thigh. With a tiny note in his delicate hand. 
 
 
 
reviewed by: stefanie40
 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Title (4/5)
The title is not catchy enough, but after reading I notice why you put that title. It has a lot to do with the storyline, and even though I only read five chapters I can see where it was going.
 
Graphics (0/5)
Well, there is no poster so I have to give you the lowest score.
 
Description and Foreword: (9/10)
I really like the description since it made me really curious about your story or maybe I’m the one obsessed with these types of story, I don’t know. But I think it’s a pretty good start, you put the necessary information for me to know of what we’re going to found in your story. Besides, I love that you've put that Luhan’s note, it was pretty funny, and when I read it I just knew it was going to be a good story.I really like the description since it made me really curious about your story or maybe I’m the one obsessed with these types of story, I don’t know. But I think it’s a pretty good start, you put the necessary information for me to know of what we’re going to found in your story. Besides, I love that you've put that Luhan’s note, it was pretty funny, and when I read it I just knew it was going to be a good story.
 
Story Layout: (0/5)
There is no layout, no poster, no background, so it’s kind of blank and boring. I think you should really fix that, since those elements give life to the page, you know. The layout should be appealing and related to the storyline of course. I would like to see a cute Sehun with cat ears and a grumpy Kai on a poster, it would be so much better! 
 
Plot: (15/30)
Okay. The catboy category is not that common, but I’ve definitely read stories with the same storyline. Wait, now that I remember, yes, it is a little bit common, but even so, your story seems more compromising and I’m still waiting for the by the way. However I really like your story and I love the characters as well. Yet I think it’s pretty predictable, I mean based on the title and on what I’ve read I know what is going to happen next. 
 
Characterization: (8.5/10)
I love that each character has its own personality, they differ very clearly from one another .They are not plain either and I love that. I have to admit that Kai pissed me off a lot of times, but I still love him. My favorite character so far is Sehun because I have a feel that he’s going to change in the future chapters, since he’s too innocent and such. I didn’t give you the full score because I need to see how they evolve first of course, since the characters need to be dynamic. 
 
Content Description (7/10)
I noticed that you're too focused on the characters, I mean your descriptions are solely based on your characters and that’s good to some extent. You didn’t t describe places and I think you should do it from now on, because it gives quality to the writing. Oh and since you are planning to do some , remember that the details are very important, a lot of details actually. In that kind of scenes you need to describe every action in detail, like this it’s going to be more enjoyable. 
 
Flow: (5/5)
I think the flow is pretty good and natural so far. Every chapter makes me want to read more and more, good job with that. The story is not too low and not too fast either, the rhythm of the events it’s perfect to be honest. Since chapter one you got me and that’s very important. We have just to wait how the story is going to progress.
 
Grammar: (10/10)
Your grammar is excellent! I don’t how you do it! Like seriously, I didn’t catch any error. So I can’t say much about this point, just one thing, good job and beautiful grammar author nim!!! 
 
Taste of the Story: (9/10)
I don’t know how many times I’ve said that, but I must say it again, I love your story. It’s entertaining and very well written. I absolutely love your writing style and the storyline is cute and compromising. Every chapter is great and it make me want to keep reading. But I would like to read more about the surroundings and stuff. I love your story and I’m waiting for more updates, good luck! 
 


TOTAL: (67.5/100)

 

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NeverNinaa
#1
Chapter 110: Hello there! I saw that your shop is accepting requests and I was wondering how can I drop a request? I'm sorry, i'm using my phone right now and i can't seem to catch the request form anywhere XD could you please guide me?
sweetcandy65
#2
I love reading your reviews in this archive because not only your reviews were interesting, it also helped me with my own mistakes! Thank goodness you made this archive ♡
JESLEN #3
Chapter 75: 5/5
Thank you for your content description. I never realized that car scene before lol. But thank you for that. You’re right about the thoughts and feelings by other characters should not be actually realized by the person’s POV. Guess I’m too immersed in the writing that I got carried away lol.
Im glad the flow is alright. Considering that it’s my first story (my practice 101), I wasn’t sure if my pacing was alright. I wasn’t exactly confident with the flashbacks being inserted like that but I’m happy you liked it (;
Grammar is not really my best asset, especially prepositions/conjunctions. I absolutely need to learn more. Thank you for your kind words despite.
Thank you very much for reviewing my story despite the rated scenes. I can never thank you enough for this very insightful review. Im glad you enjoyed the story despite everything. And once again, Im so sorry for the late pick up! I’ll credit now. Thank you once again and sorry for the loooonnnnnng comments :D
JESLEN #4
Chapter 75: 4/5
- gray eyes come from a thin layer of melanin on the front layer of the iris. The blue reflection of light is clouded over by the dark layer in front causing a dark gray color. (haha copied it from a med book lol)
-you’re right about her car injuries, I’ve only described her immense aches and pain after and the switching of faces, I’ve realized I focused too much on the switching that her injuries weren’t emphasized, thank you for emphasizing that
JESLEN #5
Chapter 75: 3/5
Your questions are gold! Thank you! I’ll keep them in mind while writing. Well to answer some of them:
-Changing face is actually possible, but would require lots of sessions. It’s from a theory and no, it isn’t practiced. *hint* from the latest story update, they changed faces, but would the outcome be the same? Would it be successful this time?*hint*hint
-what caused the amnesia---will be revealed later on haha
-whether joongki can take med degrees when he’s still young...ill try to check if I missed out a detail here  haha, I thought i made that info clear before, but apparently it’s doubtful
-whether joongki is thinking about her in the café, then she appeared…well, she’s been on his mind consistently ever since she disappeared and that day wasn’t an exemption.
-about shi hoo looking at her the same way? Let’s see what will happen 
JESLEN #6
Chapter 75: 2/5
For the layout, being consistent is so hard T__T but thank you for pointing the specific flaws. I’ll get to that and correct them. Thank you!

To be honest, I’ve never watched Good Doctor although I loved both Moon Chae Won and Joo Won. All I know is that the drama is all about doctors. Anyway, I’ve thought of a plot involving switching faces and how from that, a story will be created. I’ve added arrange marriage because to be honest, I have a feels for them (that is, before AFF was supersaturated with arrange-marriage fics). From there, Ive thought of making a second male lead as a friend helping the heroine with her struggle, but I’ve thought it too dull. I never really planned on making the doctor her love interest, but after some thoughts, why not? It would be a challenge to write. This is actually my first story and I never really thought about the number of chapters. I never really planned ahead during that time. I was full of daydreams and what ifs, that I became too excited to make it a reality, a story. Looking back, I realized how “short” my chapters are since 3-5 chapters actually happened in just a day. From there, I tried to learn how to balance scenes with my other stories. I knew how tiring it must be to read a long story T__T but since I started Imposter this way, I have to continue with what I have and improve the balancing of scenes till the end. I’ve thought of revamping after completing, and hopefully can publish it in the future 
JESLEN #7
Chapter 75: 1/5
oh my goodness. I didnt realize my review is up, but i saw it when I played a little with google search. Im so sorry for the late pick up!
Anyway for the title, I agree that some may not find it attractive enough, but for now, you're right that I should stick with it since the end is near. I will definitely think of a more mysterious title once I’ve completed and revamped the story. For the graphics, I’m glad someone pointed out the different symbolism it held. The graphic artist definitely understood what the story is all about. I couldn’t ask for more, and we’re the same! Aside from the beauty, I appreciate an artwork more if the artist can imbed hints and important symbolisms. I understand what you’re trying to point out with the trailers. Actually, I requested trailers when the story is only starting. I only gave brief description to the video artists, without giving them the little big reveals. The trailers are actually their interpretation with what little summary I gave them.
yeolsbubbletea
#8
Chapter 77: Oh, and I'm interested about the details of my grammar mistakes. I wish to talk a bit more about it :)
yeolsbubbletea
#9
Chapter 77: Thank you for the review and sorry for the late thank you :) It's a relieve that I can make characters and the plot well, but of course it's a disappointment that reviewer-nim didn't enjoy reading my story 'that much'. Based on your building critiques, I guess I have to learn more and develop a more well established story that can leave a very good taste of the story. It makes me reflect a lot on my own story and reminds me that I still have a lot to improve.
I hope everything will go well for this review shop. Have a nice day! :)