{Scars of Love by Queensabelle}

Story Title (4.5/5)

Scars of Love is quite a interesting title tbh- it has depth and it definitely attracts me. However, I've seen many different stories with quite similar tiitles and when I searched it in the search box, there were a number of results that came out as well. Since it's so overused, the title that used to appeal to me doesn't appeal to me as much now, but it is still good. When it is considered in relation to the story, it seems very cliche but when it is on its own, it's fine.

Graphics (5/5)

The graphic was wonderfully done! I love it so much. It had the olden feel (and mind you *giggles* i love olden stuff) and it was so vintage. It captured the emotions of IU and Woohyun perfectly with the neutral or kind of hurting expression. It was blended quite well and nice textures were chosen to go with the images, and the feel was completely brought out with the font as well.

Description and Foreword (6.5/10)

Okay, the grammatical mistake distracted me from the first line. *slaps myself* let's talk about content first, though.

I thought that your description was written simply but it radiated such a unique feel for some reason. No hard words were used and yet the story outline was provided, which is a good thing because it lets readers have an idea of what they are going to read. Your plot also seems interesting because a mother dating a hot guy is just... phew. There were some grammatical mistakes though:

'Had you ever have questions that you couldn't solve? 

Had you ever love the wrong person?'

C: 'Have you ever had questions that you couldn't solve?

Have you ever loved the wrong person?'

'She didn't know if she is supposed to be angry or be cool with her mother.'

For one thing, her mom likes to date guys that are much much younger than her.'

C: 'She didn't know if she was supposed to be angry or cool with her mother.

For one, her Mom liked to date guys that were much, much younger than her.'

'And few months after seeing her mother's latest boyfriend being dumped, 

Her mother brought home a charming looking guy,

Nam Woo Hyun.'

C: 'And a few months after seeing her mother's latest boyfriend get dumped,

Her mother brought home a charming looking guy:

Nam Woo Hyun.'

'Jin Ae hates it because that guy is practically 10 years younger than her mom.

Would her complicated life get any worse than this?'

C: 'Jin Ae hated it because that guy was practically 10 years younger than her Mom.

Could her complicated life get any worse than it was?'

I got pretty excited at your description also after seeing the character's name- Jin Ae, because I had a story with a character of the same name as well xD

{Story Plot}

Characterisation (16/20)

Jin Ae struck me as quite a unforgiving person. I get that Yun Hee might've called her an 'accident' once, but from the way you describe the events in the house, it seems like Yun Hee is actually quite a nice person, just that she likes to have many different boyfriends.

I thought that Yun Hee was a little oddly written, though. When you mentioned that Yun Hee called Jin Ae an accident, I thought that she would've been the stereotype unforgiving and easy to piss off mother, but as I read on, I realize that Yun Hee is actually really fun and pleasant to be with. She is not a bad person at all, but the first impression given to me was that she was one. 

Originality (8/10)

I think this plot is rather original. I don't think I've read many stories about mothers having multiple boyfriends- so it was pretty refreshing to see such an idea. I may have read stories where the girl's mother has many boyfriends but they are always cruel and ty to their daughters, and they only use the men either for money or for . But the fact that Yun Hee still treats Jin Ae so well struck me as something new, so I liked it.

Flow (4/5)

I found the flow actually quite all right. Nothing seemed too fast or too slow, and everything was just right. You did use a separate paragraph when another person talks, so that makes it less confusing because I've seen that mistake in many other stories. The speech weren't also too unrealistic or anything, they seemed just normal and every scene seemed so normal but your plot makes it all special.

Conflict twists (9/10)

Hmm... When Yun Hee slapped Jin Ae, I actually didn't get a shock. It seemed like Jin Ae really deserved it, because which daughter would speak back to her mother in this tone about such things? I get that it might have hurt her that Yun Hee had called her an accident, but her mother should still be given the respect. 

Content Descriptiveness (8/10)

You didn't use a lot big words, but I like it nonetheless. It is plain and sweet and easy to read and it flows well. The right adjectives were used to describe events and even though they weren't big words, they did spice up the sentence and add something more for the readers to think about when they imagine the picture in their heads while reading your story.

Grammar (10/15)

There are quite a few grammar mistakes, but they aren't extremely bad or very easy to spot. Those minor mistakes doesn't disrupt my flow of reading, so I guess it's pretty good. Maybe after you proofread your chapters, they will be even better. Here are some of the mistakes I've spotted in Chapter 3:

'It made everyone in the room to jump but no one dares to look up from their paper.'

C: 'It made everyone in the room jump but no one dared to look up from their paper.'

They knew what will happened if they raise their head to look where the sound came from.

C: 'They knew what would happen if they raised their head to look at the source of the sound.'

He dislike people making mistakes. One little mistake can cause huge losses. And this, may be one of the little mistakes.

C: 'He disliked people making mistakes- because one little mistake could cause huge losses. And that may have been one of the little mistakes.'

Within minutes, few securities came rushing in and greet Woo Hyun by bowing.

C: 'Within minutes, a few security guards came rushing in and greeted Woo Hyun by bowing.'

Woo Hyun closed his eyes to calmed himself down.

C: 'Woo Hyun closed his eyes to calm himself down.'

"How much do we loss?" Woo Hyun leaned on his chair and relaxed. "1o millon won?"

C: ' "How much did we lose?" Woo Hyun leaned back on his chair and relaxed. "10 million won?" '

Sung Kyu his botton lips and shooked his head. "Uh.. nope. I don't think you would want to know." He saw Woo Hyun was looking at him with eyes that says 'I-Don't-Give-A--And-Just-Spill-It'. "Well... it's uh... 50 millon won."

C: Sung Kyu his bottom lips and shook his head. "Uh... I don't think you would want to know. He saw Woo Hyun give him a look that read 'I-Don't-Give-A--So-Just-Spill-It', so he revealed it. "Well, it's uh... 50 million won."

Woo Hyun slammed the table in furious.

C: 'Woo Hyun slammed the table with his hands in fury.'

He knows Jin Ae rarely curse unless something really upset her day. He stopped his steps infront of her.

C: 'He knew Jin Ae rarely cursed unless something really upset her day. He stopped in front of her."

He doesn't want to get people's attention on the street by saying that word.

C: 'He didn't want to get people's attentions on the steet by saying that word loudly.'

There are a few more errors, but I'm sure you'll spot it if you read it again :)

Taste of the Story (9/10)

I don't know if you realized it, but I reviewed your story of 'My Brother's Bestfriend' in Pielicious Review Shop. I don't know if you've written that before this or what, but I can say that this is definitely good compared to MBB. This isn't meant to be insulting or anything, just an opinion and hopefully to you a compliment. Anyways, I thought that this story is actually quite interesting. Your writing style is plain and sweet, and it is something different from the complex reads I usually read, so I thought this was a refreshing story for me. The plot kept me hooked and I didn't lose interest anywhere. It was definitely enjoyable, and I'm interested in how the story will unravel.

Score: 80/100

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