Chrysanthemums

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chrysanthemums

Three years ago, a disaster tore apart the friendship of seven boys. Now, one them has a theory that another disaster will bring them back together again. 
 
 
reviewed by: chubbybaek
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
Title (4/5)
At first sight, the title got me like 'Ah, flower's name' . It wasn't really catchy, but nevertheless, it truly fits the whole story. At first I thought it was just going to be another boring story with a beautiful one-word title which plot didn't really suit the title. But now after finishing reading it all, I finally got what the Chrysanthemums actually meant. 
 
Graphics (3/5)
The poster was a bit too bright for my liking, it's beautiful. At first glance, it's like representing death, so I think it definitely fits the theme of the story; bittersweet friendship.
 
Description and Foreword: (7/10)
When I first read the description, I wasn't that interested because I didn't get what you were trying to tell about the whole story. But a foreword is a foreword, we cannot spill the hidden meanings of those sentences or else it wouldn't be interesting to read anymore. Although the description was very short, it was mysterious. One more thing I really like about the description was that it was perfectly explained chapters by chapters.
 
Story Layout: (5/5)
Everything was very well written and organized. The paragraphs weren't messy and neither were the fonts. I really enjoy neatly written stories and yours is one of the ones I enjoyed. Good job! 
 
Plot: (26/30)
I'm not really into friendship kind of stories because almost all of the ones I've read had some ridiculous and not making sense dramas. I'm glad that I read yours. Not only it was greatly written, it had a good plot too. People nowadays prefer romance/fantasy to friendship kind of genre, I'm sad that they even miss this beautiful story. 
 
I like the ending, it was so touching that I smiled while reading it. It got through my heart. Though the purpose of this story was just to get them back together, but for me it was not just that. I got some life lessons from it too. (I really like to find some life lessons on every fiction, excuse me lol. They help me to be mature and not childish.)
 
Characterization: (10/10)
The characters weren't out of character. Each of them had a different personality which made them complete each other. And I also like how you told each of the characters chapters by chapters. It showed us what they personally thought and made us easier to grasp what the main problem was.

Content Description (10/10)
I definitely love the way you wrote the story. I think everyone got the feel. Every single sentence was written beautifully. There was literally no problem for me to portray the scenes and everything. All of the words you used were easy to understand.
 
Flow: (5/5)
The story flows perfectly, I didn't feel like it was too fast or too slow. 
 
Grammar: (9/10)
There are no major grammatical errors, but I think you misspelled 'their' as 'they're'.
 
Taste of the Story: (8.5/10)

As I've said before, for I'm not a fan of friendship stories, I must say that your story is really good. I see your readers really enjoy reading the whole story. I agree with them saying that it was so beautiful.

 

Sorry if this took sooooooooo much time, I'd been busy but now I'm on my school holiday so I'm free! And sorry if this review isn't very long, I'm not really good with words! Thank you and keep writing! :)

 


TOTAL: (87.5/100)

 

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NeverNinaa
#1
Chapter 110: Hello there! I saw that your shop is accepting requests and I was wondering how can I drop a request? I'm sorry, i'm using my phone right now and i can't seem to catch the request form anywhere XD could you please guide me?
sweetcandy65
#2
I love reading your reviews in this archive because not only your reviews were interesting, it also helped me with my own mistakes! Thank goodness you made this archive ♡
JESLEN #3
Chapter 75: 5/5
Thank you for your content description. I never realized that car scene before lol. But thank you for that. You’re right about the thoughts and feelings by other characters should not be actually realized by the person’s POV. Guess I’m too immersed in the writing that I got carried away lol.
Im glad the flow is alright. Considering that it’s my first story (my practice 101), I wasn’t sure if my pacing was alright. I wasn’t exactly confident with the flashbacks being inserted like that but I’m happy you liked it (;
Grammar is not really my best asset, especially prepositions/conjunctions. I absolutely need to learn more. Thank you for your kind words despite.
Thank you very much for reviewing my story despite the rated scenes. I can never thank you enough for this very insightful review. Im glad you enjoyed the story despite everything. And once again, Im so sorry for the late pick up! I’ll credit now. Thank you once again and sorry for the loooonnnnnng comments :D
JESLEN #4
Chapter 75: 4/5
- gray eyes come from a thin layer of melanin on the front layer of the iris. The blue reflection of light is clouded over by the dark layer in front causing a dark gray color. (haha copied it from a med book lol)
-you’re right about her car injuries, I’ve only described her immense aches and pain after and the switching of faces, I’ve realized I focused too much on the switching that her injuries weren’t emphasized, thank you for emphasizing that
JESLEN #5
Chapter 75: 3/5
Your questions are gold! Thank you! I’ll keep them in mind while writing. Well to answer some of them:
-Changing face is actually possible, but would require lots of sessions. It’s from a theory and no, it isn’t practiced. *hint* from the latest story update, they changed faces, but would the outcome be the same? Would it be successful this time?*hint*hint
-what caused the amnesia---will be revealed later on haha
-whether joongki can take med degrees when he’s still young...ill try to check if I missed out a detail here  haha, I thought i made that info clear before, but apparently it’s doubtful
-whether joongki is thinking about her in the café, then she appeared…well, she’s been on his mind consistently ever since she disappeared and that day wasn’t an exemption.
-about shi hoo looking at her the same way? Let’s see what will happen 
JESLEN #6
Chapter 75: 2/5
For the layout, being consistent is so hard T__T but thank you for pointing the specific flaws. I’ll get to that and correct them. Thank you!

To be honest, I’ve never watched Good Doctor although I loved both Moon Chae Won and Joo Won. All I know is that the drama is all about doctors. Anyway, I’ve thought of a plot involving switching faces and how from that, a story will be created. I’ve added arrange marriage because to be honest, I have a feels for them (that is, before AFF was supersaturated with arrange-marriage fics). From there, Ive thought of making a second male lead as a friend helping the heroine with her struggle, but I’ve thought it too dull. I never really planned on making the doctor her love interest, but after some thoughts, why not? It would be a challenge to write. This is actually my first story and I never really thought about the number of chapters. I never really planned ahead during that time. I was full of daydreams and what ifs, that I became too excited to make it a reality, a story. Looking back, I realized how “short” my chapters are since 3-5 chapters actually happened in just a day. From there, I tried to learn how to balance scenes with my other stories. I knew how tiring it must be to read a long story T__T but since I started Imposter this way, I have to continue with what I have and improve the balancing of scenes till the end. I’ve thought of revamping after completing, and hopefully can publish it in the future 
JESLEN #7
Chapter 75: 1/5
oh my goodness. I didnt realize my review is up, but i saw it when I played a little with google search. Im so sorry for the late pick up!
Anyway for the title, I agree that some may not find it attractive enough, but for now, you're right that I should stick with it since the end is near. I will definitely think of a more mysterious title once I’ve completed and revamped the story. For the graphics, I’m glad someone pointed out the different symbolism it held. The graphic artist definitely understood what the story is all about. I couldn’t ask for more, and we’re the same! Aside from the beauty, I appreciate an artwork more if the artist can imbed hints and important symbolisms. I understand what you’re trying to point out with the trailers. Actually, I requested trailers when the story is only starting. I only gave brief description to the video artists, without giving them the little big reveals. The trailers are actually their interpretation with what little summary I gave them.
yeolsbubbletea
#8
Chapter 77: Oh, and I'm interested about the details of my grammar mistakes. I wish to talk a bit more about it :)
yeolsbubbletea
#9
Chapter 77: Thank you for the review and sorry for the late thank you :) It's a relieve that I can make characters and the plot well, but of course it's a disappointment that reviewer-nim didn't enjoy reading my story 'that much'. Based on your building critiques, I guess I have to learn more and develop a more well established story that can leave a very good taste of the story. It makes me reflect a lot on my own story and reminds me that I still have a lot to improve.
I hope everything will go well for this review shop. Have a nice day! :)