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Title (3.5/5)
At first when I saw your title my first thought was like “This will be a boring one” and “ People won’t check this story with that title.” Since I’ve seen some story who have the same title as yours but when I check it I was so shock that you have so many subbies you have so I thought that this might be an interesting story.
Graphics (4/5)
The moment I was you poster it made me really want to read it now and it does give a mystery feel due to the black and white concept.. Since the title is spoiler your poster matches your title well but I wish that the words under Bobby’s and Hanbin should be in white, This is my preference~
But with that Blue and Red color remind me of “A touch of color won’t hurt.” ^^
But with that Blue and Red color remind me of “A touch of color won’t hurt.” ^^
Description and Foreword: (9/10)
Your Description is short compare to the other description that I’ve read, but it have a strong pull to let the readers be curious..
Story Layout: (5/5)
There is nothing wrong in your layout. Infact, Your layout is neat and simple which I like ~
Plot: (28/30)
Since your story is based on your real school life some of the readers may have the same experience as you like me.. Since some of your chapters are based on your life you din’t use much of your imagination while writing your story but over all I really enjoy reading your story~
Characterization: (9/10)
To be honest I’m not kinda familiar with Ikon so it’s hard for me to know which one is which.. haha~
But I do really like Bobby’s character here. He reminds me during my old days, that quite person when with someone who I’m not close with , he’s insecurities and his other characteristics reflex on me. You explained the characters well and I would imagine all of them in my mind without any promlem.
But I do really like Bobby’s character here. He reminds me during my old days, that quite person when with someone who I’m not close with , he’s insecurities and his other characteristics reflex on me. You explained the characters well and I would imagine all of them in my mind without any promlem.
Content Description (10/10)
There is no problem of interpreting your story. The words you used are easy to understand which is a good thing. ^^
Flow: (4/5)
Your chapters are longer compare to other stories that I’ve read. I would be lying to myself and to you if I din’t say that I din’t get bored while reading your story but since its about school life I still continued to read while taking a break in between.
Grammar: (9/10)
Your grammar is neat and easy to understand.. This is also good for those people whose English isn’t there first language, like me. Its nice since there are some words that I din’t know that I have to check my dictionary or search from google to know the meaning which gave me a new Vocabulary.. hehe~
BUT I do saw some mistake while reading your story.
QUOTE: I was not used to stay in other people’s houses. It felt foreign for me. You know , I was not good with unfamiliar people. My mouth was sealed whenever I was in front of someone I din’t close.
CORRECTION: I was not used to stay in other people’s houses. It felt foreign for me. You know , I was not good with unfamiliar people. My mouth was sealed whenever I was in front of someone I’m not close with.
BUT I do saw some mistake while reading your story.
QUOTE: I was not used to stay in other people’s houses. It felt foreign for me. You know , I was not good with unfamiliar people. My mouth was sealed whenever I was in front of someone I din’t close.
CORRECTION: I was not used to stay in other people’s houses. It felt foreign for me. You know , I was not good with unfamiliar people. My mouth was sealed whenever I was in front of someone I’m not close with.
Taste of the Story: (8/10)
I wouldn’t say that I was hooked up with your story.. I’d say I’m fairly interested in it. To be honest I don’t get interested in a story that fast especially when it comes to GirlxBoy and but over all your plot is great , grammar is almost perfect and easy to understand and the story relates to me at some point.
TOTAL: (89.5/100)
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