How to Tame Your Writer
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Title (2/5)
I still cannot picture who or what a "writer" is; I could only picture in my head an author. Maybe it's too early into the story.
Foreward/Description (8/10)
My only critic is that it's too long.
Appearance (4/5)
Minus one for the changing fonts within the story.
Plot (10/15)
There isn't much to work with yet but I do like the idea of a romantic comedy. And I can see it heading towards that direction with Key's sassy spunky attitude.
However, content and setting the right foundation matters to me so; you need to explain what the hell Key is; I believe it's something not normal in the human world and that makes Jonghyun's reaction slightly underplayed. Also 30-40cm isn't exactly a barbie doll size so do keep in mind when you arrange his movements and accommodation in the later chapters. (ie Jonghyun can't exactly keep him in a pocket or bag for that matter)
I would have liked more build-up into shaping Jonghyun's sense of lost over the guitar. Why does it matter so much to him etc. I get he's a guitarist and all but is there some emotional attachment or is it purely about the bread and butter?
Giving you such a grade because the story barely started and there's a lot of room for improvement.
Originality (13/15)
Not like I have never come across stories about little humans but it's definitely exciting to see the direction you're gonna take.
Language (19/20)
Really nothing major, it just wasn't that smooth a read for me; could be style of writing and phrasing and it could really be a personal subjective view so just small penalization.
Flow (7/10)
Minus the lack of build-up into the story and characters so far. It is fine. Maybe just a tad bit slow in terms of progression but hey these are short opening chapters.
Characterization (5/10)
As mentioned above, Jonghyun and his relationship with the guitar.
A lot of room for more progression since Key just entered his life and he does seem rather displeased.
Heavy penalty here because Key is not human so you definitely need to explain; I'm expecting this in future chapters to come ;-)
Overall Enjoyment (7/10)
Cute and fluffy read definitely and it almost got the sides of my lips twitching so well done.
Reviewed by: eunhyuksgal
75/100!
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