Hydraengas
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Title (5/5)
Symbolizes the entire story beautifully.
Foreward/Description (9/10)
I loved how your description encompassed both the animal portion and the hydraengas perfectly. Minus one cause the animal part did confuse me a bit before going into the story.
Appearance (4/5)
Should the flowers have been red instead? Or even chosing of a blue to red gradient?
Plot (14/15)
Minus one only because you didn't address the miracle of Baekyun becoming a human and the conversation they had at the start got me curious on who was speaking which line. Personally I had a lot of thoughts that went through my head on "what could have been" and gaps but I understand this is your story so I will push those aside and go into what you have done good to deserve a high score:
- Credits to forming the animal and human born without making it too disturbingly romantic; which is a talent.
- Great development of their relationship, engaging readers emotionally
- I appreciated how you managed to bring in the hydraengas in chapter 2 after leaving me disappointed that Chanyeol did not get his wish fulfilled before death
Originality (15/15)
Very matured and unique theme on AFF and even more so in the EXO world so full score here.
Language (20/20)
Nothing to penalize here.
Flow (8/10)
The fact that you incorporated Baekyun's POV in between a third POV did cause slight confusion. You might even consider writing everything in Baekyun's POV?
Characterization (8/10)
First point off for not allowing your readers to understand Chanyeol more; what sickness is he suffering from? What was his intention in bringing a stray into his life if he knew he didn't have long to live; attaching himself emotionally.
Kris's entrance and significance was abrupt. He suddenly came into his life as a skeptic, and redeeming himself by agreeing to take care of Baekyun during Chayeol's death and then failing to do so again. I question the relationship between Kris and Chanyeol...talking about having a family...isn't that a bit romantic? Ending of the story is a big question mark too.
Overall Enjoyment (10/10)
Full marks. I enjoyed reading your beautiful story.
Reviewed by: eunhyuksgal
93/100!
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