`Mr. Wu: Behind The Scenes`
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»Mr.Wu: Behind The ScenesReview«
Title (2/5)
Technically, it doesn't fit the story. I would have gone along with something like "the origin" or "his life story" etc
Foreward/Description (5/10)
Unfortunately, it does not describe the story best. The story has behind is a strong meaning of loss, pain and a lifetime of regret. Something which I think you should have used to draw your readers in.
Appearance (3/5)
Kris is the main character so maybe a poster which centered around him more so than Tao would have been preferred. Baekhyun might not even be necessary here.
Plot (12/15)
I personally really liked your idea and general storyline but the ideas could have been brought forward in a much more effective way.
- As per mentioned above, Kris is living a lifetime of regret but the reason needs to be more explicit
- You try to position Tao as a pushing factor to which Kris attained success but its not the case
- Also you didnt make Tao as a hindrance to Kris's career
- It would have been good if Kris had to give up Tao to achieve his dreams
- Also towards the end we find out the real reason why Tao left and it had nothing to do with Kris's acting at all, it was a night of lust and alcohol influence which brought the story to a low
- You could have made Tao marry Dewei in the end instead of finding Baekhyun, who seems very sweet just to prove how Kris had ruined his life
- I'll give credit to the ending where you made Tao move on
Originality (14/15)
As mentioned above, I think this story had a lot of potential with great ideas.
Grammer & Spelling (18/20)
Generally not bad just a few small mistakes in words and phrasing but I will penalize you on the usage of korean words without translation because not all your readers might understand and its just disruptive to your writing.
Flow (5/10)
There were gaps in the timeline and they were not shown clearly. If there was a jump in timeframe I would have used a line across the paragraphs. They teleport from just strangers to seemingly lovers to honeymoon and even at the initial meeting it seemed the photoshoot was suddenly forgotten. It felt like you were rushing this story too much.
Characterization (8/10)
I do like how they were portrayed but slight criticism on handling Tao's anorexia. There's a lot of room for emotional development here, it isn't something to just skip across or overcome overnight.
Overall Enjoyment (9/10)
Despite all the criticisms it was a pleasant read. Hwaiting!
Reviewed by: eunhyuksgal
76/100!
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