How to Catch a Deer Review
Forbidden Dreamers Review GalleryTitle 5/5:
I thought the tittle was really cute. A definite eye catcher.
Foreword and Description 10/10:
I really liked the Foreword, it pulled me in. The description really gave me a glimpse at your personality. Needless to say, i enjoyed it.
Appearance 5/5:
The picture was totally amazing and the cute background with the deer picture was totally adorable. You get props for that, for sure.
Plot 10/15:
I was a bit disappointed at the plot. From the second chapter, i could guess the rest of the story. Try not to be so predictable. Next time, add a few plot twists.
Originality 10/15:
Not only was the plot predictable, it was also really cliche. I've read stories like this dozens of times. Next time, add a bit more of your personality into this story.
Grammar and Spelling 19/20:
As a word perfectionist, i was proud to see you only had one minor spelling issue in Chapter 1. I noticed you kept using "fall face flat" in this story. It sounds a bit choppy to me, so instead use "fall face first" or "fall flat on her face".
Flow 10/10:
The story flow was really great. There were no choppy or awkward parts.
Characterization 10/10:
I absolutely loved every single one of your characters. Jongdae is my favorite, the way he describes her fangirling is so funny. However, i didnt even know Nina's job until the end. Put it in the beginning next time.
Overall Enjoyment 8/10:
I really liked your story. It could have been better, but i loved it anyway. I'm in no way a fan of Exo, but i love the kids and this made me love them even more.
87/100
Good job! I've never read an Exo story before but this wasnt bad, not at all. I look forward to reading more of your stories.
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