Scars of Love
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Title (4/5)
Judging this solely based on the relationship between the mother and daughter yes I think it's almost as beautiful a title it can be. I believe the gist of the story will come in with Woohyun's entry so do note your title and intentions as you go along.
Foreward/Description (9/10)
I really like your description I think it sums up the story perfectly; in a way that gives the whole storyline away but not the twist/highlight so it's very appropriate.
I will judge you however on your language and how it could have been phrased in a better way.
Appearance (4/5)
The feel it gives is great but I might have liked it better with Myungsoo/Junhee in it just because the story up to chapter 7 has revolved around them.
Plot (11/15)
A matured storyline with deep meanings and well-thought out relationships which cover over friendship, family and love; definitely a intricate piece of artwork. But. Lower score simply because the story has barely started out.
To be honest, there isn't much to criticise at this point in time save the last chapter where Woohyun claims to not fancy old women; twenty-seven being the first limit set and then takes an interest in a thirty-three year old? Also be careful when you go into the relationship of Jinae and Woohyun because a student and a practically CEO; not easy in terms of maturity and mindset.
PS. Sunggyu and Sungyeol is <3
Originality (14/15)
As per above, credit definitely given here for choice of matured and interesting plot.
Language (15/20)
Generally, improvements can be made in the phrasing aspect starting with longer and more descriptive sentences.
Few mistakes I decided to pick out:
Does it make her a murder?
Does it make her a murderer?
Woo Hyun older cousin brother
Woo Hyun's older cousin
What you love is the richest I have, right?
You love my riches, right?
You're a 's daughter which made you a too.
You're a 's daughter, which makes you a too.
See what happens when you act all heroes!
See what happens when you act all heroic! (See, this is what happens when you try to be a hero!)
Flow (8/10)
Nothing much to penalize actually, flow is generally ok except there's no push and suspense after each chapter. It's simply one super long story randomly cut.
Characterization (9/10)
Jinae's character is very well detailed and I must say I haven't found any missing background as of yet or question her behaviour.
Woohyun's still come off a bit sketchy to me but that'll come in the future and...I love Myungsoo.
Overall Enjoyment (9/10)
I enjoyed it really. I'm an Infinite fan so it was fun, I can say that you kept to their characters pretty well (except Sunggyu and Sungyeol feels a bit switched)
Reviewed by: eunhyuksgal
83/100!
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