The Letters from That Boy
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Title (4/5)
The title is suitable as you do emphasize a lot on the written form of communication in the form of letters between the two boys.
Foreward/Description (9/10)
I loved how you inserted the dictionary definition of penpal at the start. Also the foreword is short and sweet; to the point with enough information provided to allow readers to know what to expect.
Appearance (0/5)
You do not have any posters so I think it's only fair you do not score in this segment.
Plot (13/15)
The idea behind this is very simple, fluffy and sweet. Bringing back the notion of having a penpal; a written one at that carries with it the innocence of maintaining an effort driven relationship between two parties.
I like how you're developing their relationship both as penpals and as enemies in real life. Credits to steering their real life relationship in the right direction as well.
However, as per your readers' comments, their stupidity is beyond me. But you do make it a point to clarify it after each chapter so I shall not penalize you too much on that.
You might want to steer away from the letter for a bit to focus on their real life character development. Suggestion: a bit of focus on Donghae's relationship with Hara, Eunhyuk and Seohyun, their families perhaps and most importantly why they hate each other. Not a full-blown story cause I'm sure this will be revealed later but dropping hints would be nice. Leaving time in between letters for character development in reality will be helpful because we can do a comparison of how they are in the letters and how they really act with people around them; highlighting the trust put into each other in the form of penpals.
Just some suggestions for story development hope they're useful ;-)
Originality (14/15)
As mentioned above, a very cute and fresh topic to write on.
Grammer & Spelling (20/20)
I didn't spot any mistakes and it takes creativity to play with words used in their "letters" especially the name-calling bits.
Flow (8/10)
So far so good as we see the relationship build-up; as mentioned above more reality checks would be good.
Characterization (8/10)
As mentioned above as well, a room of room for character development in your story. Looking forward ;-)
Overall Enjoyment (10/10)
I thoroughly enjoyed the reading; chapters are short and fluffy.
Reviewed by: eunhyuksgal
86/100!
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