Frozen in time with Ice Price Kris Wu
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Title (3/5)
So far, I don't get how this is "frozen in time"; time-travelling might be a bit more appropriate but it will give away the story? Also Kris Wu is redundant; "the Ice Prince" would have suffice.
Foreward/Description (8/10)
Description is cute. Foreword carries a good meaning as well but the language can be improved upon.
Appearance (4/5)
I love everything except Kris's face; you could have chosen a "colder looking" picture versus this which looks rather shifty to me.
Plot (13/15)
So far so good just have a few concerns on the content:
-Why was Hyunmi wondering how Kris looked like even though she had already seen him in the coffin
-Why does she need princess courses; I would have assumed she was already of royal status when betrothed to a prince
-I would have liked more time spent on Hyunmi's reaction when she woke up and realised she had travelled back in time; I mean I sure would have freaked to death waking up to an alien place
Looking forward to how you are going to turn their relationship into a deep one despite a bad start. Do be careful because this is now Hyunmi we are talking about and not Kang Min Hee so their characters might not be the same? So Kris could have fallen in love with Min Hee but he might not like Hyunmi. Assuming we are not going to change the past; do try to emphasize that they have the same personalities; use Joohyun well she will be important. Not sure if you would like to touch on what happened in the present time with Hyunmi's disappearance?
Originality (13/15)
Interesting so far. Very traditional fairy tale story.
Grammer & Spelling (19/20)
Nothing too serious except a few mistakes here and there:
"Umh, Ms Kim? We're supposed to gave a tour around the Musuem right? Ms Lee said so." -Erm Miss Kim, aren't we supposed to be conducting a tour of the museum? Ms Lee told me so"
Flow (7/10)
Its alright so far except for the few points of confusion as mentioned above. Also note your italics; some of them don't make sense. Do they refer to thoughts or just the past or dialogues?
Characterization (8/10)
Hyunmi's character has been quite well-established. Make sure you do up Min Hee's well and link the two.
Overall Enjoyment (10/10)
Giving you a 10 because it keeps me waiting for more; wanting to hit the subscribe button to find out what happens next ;-)
Reviewed by: eunhyuksgal
85/100!
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