Night of the Sakura Tree Hill
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Title (4/5)
I like it because it simply suits the rest of the story so well; mysterious with a poetic symbolism present.
Just a tad bit of feedback on the lenght; not sure if "Night of" might be necessary in terms if its significant. Adding "night of" objectifies and brings attention to the timeframe and the event itself instead of an image of the Sakura Tree Hill.
Foreword/Description (5/10)
I'm faulting you here only because I believe with your capabilities, you could have done so much more for the description. Here it was simplistic and straightforward but you gave away the ending despite building up an aura and suspense within your chapters.
I would have expected a teaser, a snippet, which keeps your readers wondering more.
Appearance (5/5)
Full marks here. What else is there to ask for in the poster? Good background, good image, etc. The story seems to be based off the picture to me. Everything else was neat, no complains.
Plot (12/15)
I'm going to begin this with a huge compliment; this story is so beautifully written it is nothing short of a work of art. It has a magical and poetic feel which doesn't allow the deep meaning to escape the readers as well.
I did have a read at your "meaning" chapter so that is a bit "unfair" but to be honest I didn't quite catch the "actual" meaning you were trying to convey though I had a lot more interpretations of my own; such as how Jongup is a fragment of her imagination, different symbols and meanings for the stars and sakura etc. And yes I did feel the friendship + romantic relationship between the two and about leaving someone behind. But her psychological aspect plays a huge part so that caught my attention the most.
Overall in terms of plot wise there's not much "happening" so I won't comment a lot there but being the I am, I do have technicalities to point out:
- I thought Nika was being annoying in chapter 2 where she sounded out her unneeded comments interrupting the story; she already heard it many times and yet found the need to disturb Jongup; that I didn't quite get
- I am not an expert in astrology but when they were naming stars etc; don't you need a telescope for that and not just your eye?
But to sum it up, plot was interesting.
Originality (15/15)
I'll give you full marks here due to it's unique nature and everything else above.
Language (19/20)
Your writing is generally flawless except some phrasing tended to look a tad bit awkward to me but no big deal with no impact on your storyline and meanings coming across.
Flow (10/10)
Not much plot as I mentioned above but general flow was well-paced despite the huge time gap.
Characterization (5/10)
I can't give you a highscore here because there's so much mystery involved its hard to read and judge the characters. Their relationship started off light and then it became serious (although for valid reasons) and the departure was a tad bit sketchy since you didn't include any emotional scenes.
And at the end it seems Nika could possibly be insane so...
Really not a critieria for your story to be judged in in my opinion.
Overall Enjoyment (10/10)
I really liked it. It was a light and heartening read =)
Reviewed by: eunhyuksgal
85/100!
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