Safekeeping
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Title (5/5)
The title holds complete relevance to the story. Celeste has waited a year for Luhan to appear. When he finally comes she has to do her best to safekeep him for his training and protect him against the dangers.
Foreward/Description (10/10)
I think the description was an accurate depiction of the story istelf. Cryptic and requiring decoding. It has the perfect essence of mystery that makes the story all the more intersting to read.
Appearance (4/5)
There's not much to say here. The font and color is fine. But, there is a problem with grammar that affects the appearance that I'll address below.
Plot (15/15)
I'd say the direction of the plot is ideal. That might seem vague. But, up until now its been background info, meetings and introducing all of the characters and their purpose. Chapter nine was the first real advancement in plot, so its still in the cradling stages. But, if you go with what you've got so far I'd say it will turn out dashingly. I can't be sure, though. There could be twists to come, depending on what you've got up your sleeve.
Originality (15/15)
Wolf/werewolf is definitely common. But, the concept doesn't depend heavily on exo's home planet, their powers or anything that could connect it to other stories of the same AU. And you've definitely interlaced elements that give it its own charm to set it aside further.
Grammar (13/20)
Whether or not you indent before a new paragraph is becoming a stylistic choice these days rather than a standard for all books/novels. But, a space is required between or it begins to look messy and squashed together. I'm afraid to say that you've ran into this problem. There were also typos and I'd run it through a spell check.
Flow (10/10)
The flow so far is nicely paced. That's all I can say for now because the story isn't finished.
Characterization (10/10)
All the characters have a place and defined traits. Celeste's compassion(even if she hates it and sees it as a weakness), Luhan's loyalty and slight daftness, Kris' cold yet caring personality, and Lay's ability to see past all pretense really shine through. Even the supporting and minors have their distinguished personas. They are assigned well and not just for the intened purpose of using all exo members. That sounds harsh, but I've seen way too many stories throwing the members in randomly so they can say that all of exo is in it. Even if half the members serve no real purpose. On a side note, I'd like to give you a strong pat on the back for Lay's character. He's not sleepy lay or forgetful lay or any other stereotype fics love to shove him into. That's completely bias, but still, I couldn't help but point it out.
Overall Enjoyment (10/10)
I really like this story. It's mysterious and exciting.
Reviewed by: MiaMae14
92/100!
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