When Love Is Not Enough - Review
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»When Love Is Not Enough Review«
Title (3/5)
The title states that "love isnt enough" when in this story you are actually trying to show that love can cross all boundaries even in the loss of memory and death so a title with an opposite meaning would be more suitable. You can look into focusing on the "gift" idea as well; the fact that you made people with special gifts or even guardians.
Foreward/Description (10/10)
It pretty much sums up the story so I think it's quite well thought of.
Appearance (4/5)
It is an ok poster but it does not bring out the feeling of luhan looking after sehun.
Plot (13/15)
The plot in general is great, I love the idea behind it but improvement can be made on story development and description/explanation.
The side couples really surprised me; Kris+Luhan, Kai+Lay and Kris+Chanyeol but good choice because they all end up with someone =]
I think more focus needs to be added to how Luhan is supposed to help Sehun and his actions because too much emphasis was placed on their love relationship development.
Kris is a perfect catalyst to their relationship and I believe more could have been input into their reunion after the tragedy; more emotions and angst. Same applies to part where Luhan leaves Sehun; their final day together. Since I am on this point, you have also failed to explain the memory loss part clearly; what happens? who forgets? everyone who has met Luhan? It seems Kai and Lay did but not Kris? Also more introduction to the idea of "gifted humans" and "guardians" can be expanded upon.
Overall I feel that this plot had a lot more potential.
Originality (15/15)
Definitely full marks here because I think its a lovely storyline and idea.
Grammer & Spelling (15/20)
I understand that this is your weak point but do try to improve on it as it affects the overall reading as this is one of the reasons why certain scenes lacked the emotional impact.
Flow (10/10)
You planned your story out well and it was paced in a good manner.
Characterization (7/10)
A lot more needed as mentioned above.
Overall Enjoyment (8/10)
Could be better written but loved the plot.
Reviewed by: eunhyuksgal
80/100!
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