The Completed Chapter
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Title 4/5
When I first seen the title it sounded a bit boring but as I read I realized why you named it the way you did.
Foreward/Description 9/10
I honestly loved the description and foreward. You gave the right information about what the story may be about and also gave us a little taste of what the story will tell. I love the poem as the foreward.
Appearance 3/5
The art is nice but I don’t understand why it’s a railroad. Why couldn’t you use a rose? Placing the rose on the title would show that it would symbolize something. For in the story in symbolizes the main characters and the love that was given.
Plot 15/15
I love it. For me it gave me a lesson. It tells you to forget about your first love and move on. That s/he was someone who had written a chapter in your book of life and taught you something or to fill in the pages.
Originality 13/15
I haven’t read much one shots and if I do it never really gave me a lesson. So for me this was original. I really like how you viewed in it in first person and not in third omniscient. It really gave me the feelings of the main character and I understood how she felt about her first love.
Language 20/20
I love your writing style so I don’t have much to say here but just use more vocabulary. From where you are at now, I wouldn’t be surprised if you were able to use a wide variety of vocab in your future stories.
Flow 10/10
The flow was great I just wished you added more with chanyeol and showed how they were in loved. Like activities that they did together. Then get to the part where he started to pull away.
Characterization 10/10
The characters were great. It showed how over time the main character began to understand what was happening and she was able to grow as a person.
Overall Enjoyment 10/10
I loved it, honestly. I subscribed to it, I hope that you would be able to get more subbies ^^.
Reviewed by: abie529
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