Pirates: A Sinners Curse

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Story

Title (4/5)

Befitting enough but nothing too captivating unless one is into pirate stories. 
 
Foreward/Description (8/10)
 
I like how its short and simple without giving too much away but you did place a lot of emphasis on "Lee Sora's" secret which was revealed so soon into the story at chapter 2. 
 
Appearance (3/5)
 
Nice feel for a pirate story within the poster. Does give a Pirates of the Caribbean feel but their outfits do not match; modern western pirate versus traditional Korean princess?
 
Plot (10/15)
 
It's really too soon to determine if it's going to be a good story but as mentioned above, you seem to be combining two different worlds and perhaps even timeline so you have to watch it. Modern weaponry onboard a ship? Modern technology and clothes for the pirates? Versus traditional Korean princess? How do Korean pirates look like? Also Kyungsoo and William Tate; names indicate they are of such different backgrounds?
 
Considering this is a pirate and perhaps action filled story, the first chapter needed more action and descriptions for Kyungsoo's great escape. 
 
Originality (9/15)
 
I have to give you slight credit here because pirate-based stories aren't common but it feels too much of a POC rip-off sorry.
 
Language (13/20)
 
Spelling mistakes, plural and singular form, tenses and phrasing are a few things you should improve on.
 
Secondly, I'm not too fond of using pirate language within the writing especially if neither you nor your readers are familiar and fluent in it.
 
Flow (7/10)
 
It's alright so far but I was shocked her big secret was revealed so soon. Also you labeled both of them Sora so that was confusing. You could have referred to her as the servant before revealing that her name was not Sora. You wrote it as Sora was on the ship...Sora walked around the room...all within the same chapter. 
 
Characterization (4/10)
 
I believe their background will come later into the story. Currently, there's really nothing I can read into the characters and they barely sparked interest in me. 
 
Overall Enjoyment (5/10)
 
Cute read. I give credit for imagination. 
 
Reviewed by: eunhyuksgal
 
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ThanhXuan #1
Chapter 135: Thanks for the review ♡
Amalya #2
Chapter 134: Thank you for taking the time to review my story oohkatsoo. I didn't mind the wait and getting the additional perspective was a good thing in the end. ;)
I have been warned about the too many characters too quickly thing in a previous review and have yet to try and fix that, but duly noted again. haha As for the capitalization issue, I think I was going for that fairly bizarre context (in English anyway) where you capitalize some of the terms when they refer to very specific named creatures (Namjoon's father as a Titan (Perses in his back story) versus titans as a race). Likewise for chimaera though that one was never meant to be capitalized. The only one I really had an issue with in writing was actually Cyclops and that was because my spell checker kept saying the lowercase spelling was wrong. >.> lol
I will certainly consider adding more descriptions or definitions for some of the harder to grasp terms, such as what a titan actually is, in the future. I was much better about doing that in my Norse mythology story to be honest. lol I'm pretty sure the time crunch to finish it before the deadline made me sloppy here.
The game they played was meant to sort of parallel a crude cross between more modern day football (in the US) as evidenced by the in-story name, which is a fairly barbaric sport to begin with, and the gladiator events of ancient Greece and Rome, which were very barbaric events in which the competitors often died. As for the sudden appearance of the monster, I'm not sure I can actually fix that one, or if I want to at the moment. I'll think it over and see what comes of it, but either way, I do appreciate the review all the same.
It's especially nice to confirm what I am able to do well in the story just as much as it's good to be aware of what can be smoothed out more. So again, thank you for the review. I hope my comment might be able to help explain things a bit more in turn but I shall credit you and the shop immediately. ^_^
aya-ELF #3
Chapter 4: Hi!! I have a question, do you guys only do reviews for completed stories??
libianno #4
Chapter 128: Thank you for the review on Chasing Pavements. I appreciate you straight forward and honest opinions. I will use the pointers you have provided me well :)
funkybastard #5
Chapter 12: Hii, I just start writing and i really want to improve my skill and i like how blunt and forward this review shop is ^^. How do i request from the shop?
thelittleluhan #6
Chapter 113: Thank you for the review! I didn't expect what you gave me, I was honestly thinking it would be a lot worse. I'll definitely keep in mind what you said about Title and Appearance. I did feel the same about the title being less focused on the main character when you mentioned it, so that's definitely something I'll work on. I might see if I can change the title to a more fitting one (but I'm soooo bad at titles >_<). Thank you again for taking the time to review my story. You don't know how much it means to me that you at least enjoyed it ^_^
sorindae_ #7
Chapter 110: This review really hurt my feelings. But it's okay. I know of I have to improve my grammar. Thank you for helping review this story.
ZiahZiah #8
Thank you so much for the review! (honestly, I thought I'd get worse) hahaha I'll change that grammar error soon. I'm so glad you pointed that out. :) by the way, may I ask who my reviewer was? I wanted to credit them in my Foreword! Thank you! :D
-dulcet #9
Chapter 84: Oh thank you for the review. I'll credit you indeed I'll keep your tips in mind. Thank you :)
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