Pirates: A Sinners Curse

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Title (4/5)

Befitting enough but nothing too captivating unless one is into pirate stories. 
 
Foreward/Description (8/10)
 
I like how its short and simple without giving too much away but you did place a lot of emphasis on "Lee Sora's" secret which was revealed so soon into the story at chapter 2. 
 
Appearance (3/5)
 
Nice feel for a pirate story within the poster. Does give a Pirates of the Caribbean feel but their outfits do not match; modern western pirate versus traditional Korean princess?
 
Plot (10/15)
 
It's really too soon to determine if it's going to be a good story but as mentioned above, you seem to be combining two different worlds and perhaps even timeline so you have to watch it. Modern weaponry onboard a ship? Modern technology and clothes for the pirates? Versus traditional Korean princess? How do Korean pirates look like? Also Kyungsoo and William Tate; names indicate they are of such different backgrounds?
 
Considering this is a pirate and perhaps action filled story, the first chapter needed more action and descriptions for Kyungsoo's great escape. 
 
Originality (9/15)
 
I have to give you slight credit here because pirate-based stories aren't common but it feels too much of a POC rip-off sorry.
 
Language (13/20)
 
Spelling mistakes, plural and singular form, tenses and phrasing are a few things you should improve on.
 
Secondly, I'm not too fond of using pirate language within the writing especially if neither you nor your readers are familiar and fluent in it.
 
Flow (7/10)
 
It's alright so far but I was shocked her big secret was revealed so soon. Also you labeled both of them Sora so that was confusing. You could have referred to her as the servant before revealing that her name was not Sora. You wrote it as Sora was on the ship...Sora walked around the room...all within the same chapter. 
 
Characterization (4/10)
 
I believe their background will come later into the story. Currently, there's really nothing I can read into the characters and they barely sparked interest in me. 
 
Overall Enjoyment (5/10)
 
Cute read. I give credit for imagination. 
 
Reviewed by: eunhyuksgal
 
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aya-ELF #1
Chapter 85: Thank you for the review dear! I was relly shocked with the language part OTL, I'm gonna go fix it right now! By the way, do you think it will be better if I write a simple prologue to explain the life of a demon and what's the benefit to have a mate??
EPIONE #2
Heyy,

I don't know if you remember me, but I was just wondering where you're currently working this year as a reviewer?
I'd love to request from you again.

Best,
Epione
teenme14 #3
Chapter 72: Okay.. Thanks for the review ^^

Now to clarify XD
Title: As you said, the highlight/ of the story has not yet come. So yeahh..
Plot: This is my first chaptered story after my long hiatus from writing. After the hiatus, I wrote a two shot. So, I kinda forgot how to write a chaptered story XD The present time of the story is at the end of Summer (hence, their summer break). Oh, and I plan on making this fic a 40 chaptered fic.
- I guess I haven't mentioned the type of phone she is using. Samsung phones are quite cheap in Korea but are also expensive for people with financial probs. So, back to her phone. The phone she is using is a Samsung Galaxy Win Pro G3812. And she is using pre-paid which you'll have to top-up each time the credit finishes or it expires, whichever comes first.
- The cafe's delivery system works like this: A person will order through phone, and they jot down the name and address of the person. One of the workers will be asked to deliver the drink/food. If the house is near enough, they deliver by foot. If it is rather far, they ride a bike.
-I am not a dancer and... OTL I really need a dancer to help me whenever dancing scenes come up TT.TT
- About Mr. and Mrs. Kim, it will be known in the next chapter that I'm writing now.
Characterization: I am really bad at this XD Jongin's feelings at first was just merely interested. It's not a crush. He just simply feels interested by the girl. Hana & Sehun... We'll know more once we're more into the story XD

So.. yeah.. Thanks ^^ Sorry for the English mistakes. English is not my first language
teenme14 #4
Chapter 62: Thank you for the review! Glad you liked it! ^^ it's a bit fast paced coz I had a deadline to follow and finished it in 2 days xD I was planning on making a special chapter for the part before jongdae confessed to get to know Hye Sun better and how Jongdae came to like her. I was in a rush, so yeah. I was thinking that a LIFETIME to forget was that, he WOULD eventually fall in love with another girl but he would never forget Hye Sun since she was his first love. About the part where she died: I wanted her to die in an accifent rather than in the surgery was because Jongdae's parents died in an accident too which would somehow, idk, increase the pain (whut)
hanajoe #5
Chapter 32: Thanks for the review^^
I know my i'm not good enough in English T-T but i will try my best to write it!
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