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Title (5/5)

Perfect title for a story of its perfection.
 
Foreward/Description (10/10)
 
Your short, simple and captivating descriptions are always well done. 
 
Appearance (4/5)
 
I couldn't quite understand the words on the poster; "watch him back..." and I reckon a more innocent and casual picture of Hyukjae could be chosen. But I have to give additional points for the beautifully created beautiful wolf Donghae.
 
Plot (14/15)
 
A fresh and interesting concept being introduced here; a differing take on the werewolf myth.
 
Just a couple of "questions" you might need to answer in the following chapters
-Since the whole species is new, we need to understand what is the factor that makes them transform between wolf and human (so far we can guess its the weather); how these species came about and whether they have any control over their transformation (especially since you brought in the young kids). Also I am not clear on the memories attained and kept in between the transformations. With your good desrciptive writing skills it might be interesting to do a physical write-up on one transformation as well.
-One thing I felt slightly lacking in the opening chapters was Hyukjae's growth and feelings towards the wolf within the 18 years because I get the fascination of a small kid but how they could be prolonged is a different matter.
-Also what Donghae thinks or feels about Hyukjae exactly; especially in his human form apart from just the comforting scent.
 
Originality (15/15)
 
Creating a new species is always interesting and challenging. You have definitely done well here.
 
Grammer & Spelling (20/20)
 
Nothing to penalize here.
 
Flow (9/10)
 
The chapters are slightly more lengthy mostly due to detailed descriptions. 
 
But I definitely like how their relationship is developing.
 
Characterization (9/10)
 
As mentioned above, more insight into their personal development and emotions could be good.
 
Overall Enjoyment (10/10)
 
Capitvated me from the start. Hit the subscribe button so full marks here. All the best!
 
Reviewed by: eunhyuksgal
 
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aya-ELF #1
Chapter 85: Thank you for the review dear! I was relly shocked with the language part OTL, I'm gonna go fix it right now! By the way, do you think it will be better if I write a simple prologue to explain the life of a demon and what's the benefit to have a mate??
EPIONE #2
Heyy,

I don't know if you remember me, but I was just wondering where you're currently working this year as a reviewer?
I'd love to request from you again.

Best,
Epione
teenme14 #3
Chapter 72: Okay.. Thanks for the review ^^

Now to clarify XD
Title: As you said, the highlight/ of the story has not yet come. So yeahh..
Plot: This is my first chaptered story after my long hiatus from writing. After the hiatus, I wrote a two shot. So, I kinda forgot how to write a chaptered story XD The present time of the story is at the end of Summer (hence, their summer break). Oh, and I plan on making this fic a 40 chaptered fic.
- I guess I haven't mentioned the type of phone she is using. Samsung phones are quite cheap in Korea but are also expensive for people with financial probs. So, back to her phone. The phone she is using is a Samsung Galaxy Win Pro G3812. And she is using pre-paid which you'll have to top-up each time the credit finishes or it expires, whichever comes first.
- The cafe's delivery system works like this: A person will order through phone, and they jot down the name and address of the person. One of the workers will be asked to deliver the drink/food. If the house is near enough, they deliver by foot. If it is rather far, they ride a bike.
-I am not a dancer and... OTL I really need a dancer to help me whenever dancing scenes come up TT.TT
- About Mr. and Mrs. Kim, it will be known in the next chapter that I'm writing now.
Characterization: I am really bad at this XD Jongin's feelings at first was just merely interested. It's not a crush. He just simply feels interested by the girl. Hana & Sehun... We'll know more once we're more into the story XD

So.. yeah.. Thanks ^^ Sorry for the English mistakes. English is not my first language
teenme14 #4
Chapter 62: Thank you for the review! Glad you liked it! ^^ it's a bit fast paced coz I had a deadline to follow and finished it in 2 days xD I was planning on making a special chapter for the part before jongdae confessed to get to know Hye Sun better and how Jongdae came to like her. I was in a rush, so yeah. I was thinking that a LIFETIME to forget was that, he WOULD eventually fall in love with another girl but he would never forget Hye Sun since she was his first love. About the part where she died: I wanted her to die in an accifent rather than in the surgery was because Jongdae's parents died in an accident too which would somehow, idk, increase the pain (whut)
hanajoe #5
Chapter 32: Thanks for the review^^
I know my i'm not good enough in English T-T but i will try my best to write it!
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