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Title (2/5)

I still cannot picture who or what a "writer" is; I could only picture in my head an author. Maybe it's too early into the story.
 
Foreward/Description (8/10)
 
My only critic is that it's too long.
 
Appearance (4/5)
 
Minus one for the changing fonts within the story.
 
Plot (10/15)
 
There isn't much to work with yet but I do like the idea of a romantic comedy. And I can see it heading towards that direction with Key's sassy spunky attitude. 
 
However, content and setting the right foundation matters to me so; you need to explain what the hell Key is; I believe it's something not normal in the human world and that makes Jonghyun's reaction slightly underplayed. Also 30-40cm isn't exactly a barbie doll size so do keep in mind when you arrange his movements and accommodation in the later chapters. (ie Jonghyun can't exactly keep him in a pocket or bag for that matter)
 
I would have liked more build-up into shaping Jonghyun's sense of lost over the guitar. Why does it matter so much to him etc.  I get he's a guitarist and all but is there some emotional attachment or is it purely about the bread and butter?
 
Giving you such a grade because the story barely started and there's a lot of room for improvement. 
 
 
Originality (13/15)
 
Not like I have never come across stories about little humans but it's definitely exciting to see the direction you're gonna take.
 
Language (19/20)
 
Really nothing major, it just wasn't that smooth a read for me; could be style of writing and phrasing and it could really be a personal subjective view so just small penalization.
 
Flow (7/10)
 
Minus the lack of build-up into the story and characters so far. It is fine. Maybe just a tad bit slow in terms of progression but hey these are short opening chapters.
 
Characterization (5/10)
 
As mentioned above, Jonghyun and his relationship with the guitar. 
 
A lot of room for more progression since Key just entered his life and he does seem rather displeased. 
 
Heavy penalty here because Key is not human so you definitely need to explain; I'm expecting this in future chapters to come ;-)
 
Overall Enjoyment (7/10)
 
Cute and fluffy read definitely and it almost got the sides of my lips twitching so well done. 
 
Reviewed by: eunhyuksgal
 
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aya-ELF #1
Chapter 85: Thank you for the review dear! I was relly shocked with the language part OTL, I'm gonna go fix it right now! By the way, do you think it will be better if I write a simple prologue to explain the life of a demon and what's the benefit to have a mate??
EPIONE #2
Heyy,

I don't know if you remember me, but I was just wondering where you're currently working this year as a reviewer?
I'd love to request from you again.

Best,
Epione
teenme14 #3
Chapter 72: Okay.. Thanks for the review ^^

Now to clarify XD
Title: As you said, the highlight/ of the story has not yet come. So yeahh..
Plot: This is my first chaptered story after my long hiatus from writing. After the hiatus, I wrote a two shot. So, I kinda forgot how to write a chaptered story XD The present time of the story is at the end of Summer (hence, their summer break). Oh, and I plan on making this fic a 40 chaptered fic.
- I guess I haven't mentioned the type of phone she is using. Samsung phones are quite cheap in Korea but are also expensive for people with financial probs. So, back to her phone. The phone she is using is a Samsung Galaxy Win Pro G3812. And she is using pre-paid which you'll have to top-up each time the credit finishes or it expires, whichever comes first.
- The cafe's delivery system works like this: A person will order through phone, and they jot down the name and address of the person. One of the workers will be asked to deliver the drink/food. If the house is near enough, they deliver by foot. If it is rather far, they ride a bike.
-I am not a dancer and... OTL I really need a dancer to help me whenever dancing scenes come up TT.TT
- About Mr. and Mrs. Kim, it will be known in the next chapter that I'm writing now.
Characterization: I am really bad at this XD Jongin's feelings at first was just merely interested. It's not a crush. He just simply feels interested by the girl. Hana & Sehun... We'll know more once we're more into the story XD

So.. yeah.. Thanks ^^ Sorry for the English mistakes. English is not my first language
teenme14 #4
Chapter 62: Thank you for the review! Glad you liked it! ^^ it's a bit fast paced coz I had a deadline to follow and finished it in 2 days xD I was planning on making a special chapter for the part before jongdae confessed to get to know Hye Sun better and how Jongdae came to like her. I was in a rush, so yeah. I was thinking that a LIFETIME to forget was that, he WOULD eventually fall in love with another girl but he would never forget Hye Sun since she was his first love. About the part where she died: I wanted her to die in an accifent rather than in the surgery was because Jongdae's parents died in an accident too which would somehow, idk, increase the pain (whut)
hanajoe #5
Chapter 32: Thanks for the review^^
I know my i'm not good enough in English T-T but i will try my best to write it!
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