Scars of Love

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Title (4/5)

Judging this solely based on the relationship between the mother and daughter yes I think it's almost as beautiful a title it can be. I believe the gist of the story will come in with Woohyun's entry so do note your title and intentions as you go along.

Foreward/Description (9/10)

I really like your description I think it sums up the story perfectly; in a way that gives the whole storyline away but not the twist/highlight so it's very appropriate.

I will judge you however on your language and how it could have been phrased in a better way.

Appearance (4/5)

The feel it gives is great but I might have liked it better with Myungsoo/Junhee in it just because the story up to chapter 7 has revolved around them.

Plot (11/15)

A matured storyline with deep meanings and well-thought out relationships which cover over friendship, family and love; definitely a intricate piece of artwork. But. Lower score simply because the story has barely started out.

To be honest, there isn't much to criticise at this point in time save the last chapter where Woohyun claims to not fancy old women; twenty-seven being the first limit set and then takes an interest in a thirty-three year old? Also be careful when you go into the relationship of Jinae and Woohyun because a student and a practically CEO; not easy in terms of maturity and mindset.

PS. Sunggyu and Sungyeol is <3

Originality (14/15)

As per above, credit definitely given here for choice of matured and interesting plot.

Language (15/20)

Generally, improvements can be made in the phrasing aspect starting with longer and more descriptive sentences.

Few mistakes I decided to pick out:

Does it make her a murder?

Does it make her a murderer?

Woo Hyun older cousin brother

Woo Hyun's older cousin

What you love is the richest I have, right?

You love my riches, right?

You're a 's daughter which made you a too.

You're a 's daughter, which makes you a too.

See what happens when you act all heroes!

See what happens when you act all heroic! (See, this is what happens when you try to be a hero!)

Flow (8/10)

Nothing much to penalize actually, flow is generally ok except there's no push and suspense after each chapter. It's simply one super long story randomly cut.

Characterization (9/10)

Jinae's character is very well detailed and I must say I haven't found any missing background as of yet or question her behaviour.

Woohyun's still come off a bit sketchy to me but that'll come in the future and...I love Myungsoo.

Overall Enjoyment (9/10)

I enjoyed it really. I'm an Infinite fan so it was fun, I can say that you kept to their characters pretty well (except Sunggyu and Sungyeol feels a bit switched)

Reviewed by: eunhyuksgal

83/100!

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aya-ELF #1 Jun 23, 2015 22:02:46

Chapter 85: Thank you for the review dear! I was relly shocked with the language part OTL, I'm gonna go fix it right now! By the way, do you think it will be better if I write a simple prologue to explain the life of a demon and what's the benefit to have a mate??

EPIONE #2 Feb 9, 2015 04:02:33

Heyy,

I don't know if you remember me, but I was just wondering where you're currently working this year as a reviewer?
I'd love to request from you again.

Best,
Epione

teenme14 #3 Nov 12, 2014 06:36:08

Chapter 72: Okay.. Thanks for the review ^^

Now to clarify XD
Title: As you said, the highlight/ of the story has not yet come. So yeahh..
Plot: This is my first chaptered story after my long hiatus from writing. After the hiatus, I wrote a two shot. So, I kinda forgot how to write a chaptered story XD The present time of the story is at the end of Summer (hence, their summer break). Oh, and I plan on making this fic a 40 chaptered fic.
- I guess I haven't mentioned the type of phone she is using. Samsung phones are quite cheap in Korea but are also expensive for people with financial probs. So, back to her phone. The phone she is using is a Samsung Galaxy Win Pro G3812. And she is using pre-paid which you'll have to top-up each time the credit finishes or it expires, whichever comes first.
- The cafe's delivery system works like this: A person will order through phone, and they jot down the name and address of the person. One of the workers will be asked to deliver the drink/food. If the house is near enough, they deliver by foot. If it is rather far, they ride a bike.
-I am not a dancer and... OTL I really need a dancer to help me whenever dancing scenes come up TT.TT
- About Mr. and Mrs. Kim, it will be known in the next chapter that I'm writing now.
Characterization: I am really bad at this XD Jongin's feelings at first was just merely interested. It's not a crush. He just simply feels interested by the girl. Hana & Sehun... We'll know more once we're more into the story XD

So.. yeah.. Thanks ^^ Sorry for the English mistakes. English is not my first language

teenme14 #4 Jun 19, 2014 07:25:27

Chapter 62: Thank you for the review! Glad you liked it! ^^ it's a bit fast paced coz I had a deadline to follow and finished it in 2 days xD I was planning on making a special chapter for the part before jongdae confessed to get to know Hye Sun better and how Jongdae came to like her. I was in a rush, so yeah. I was thinking that a LIFETIME to forget was that, he WOULD eventually fall in love with another girl but he would never forget Hye Sun since she was his first love. About the part where she died: I wanted her to die in an accifent rather than in the surgery was because Jongdae's parents died in an accident too which would somehow, idk, increase the pain (whut)

hanajoe #5 Apr 11, 2014 08:15:45

Chapter 32: Thanks for the review^^
I know my i'm not good enough in English T-T but i will try my best to write it!