Tell No Tales (Two Sides of the Same Coin)
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Title (3/5)
It is alright and I might be able to guess already the meaning and symbolism of "Two Sides of the Same Coin" but "Tell No Tales" seem to have no bearing. A suggestion might be to have your title in sync with your greek idios, I find that a selling point.
Foreward/Description (7/10)
Simple and straightforward but lacking in excitement and suspense which the story does provide because you're drawing a web between all the characters creating a complicated and supposedly shocking link.
Appearance (0/5)
No points here as there's no poster.
Plot (10/15)
It's a pretty good plot on an overall. The idea is there. Just a couple of pointers.
-On the way you write; especially in the first chapter when you're talking about "you" and "Yongguk" its gets confusing because it feels like it's from "your" POV but you go pretty deep into "Yongguk's" feelings as well. Took me until chapter 3 to fully get used to your style of writing; a third POV which talks about "you" and "Yongguk". And the thing about writing about "you", you're trying to make the reader feel that its them in the story but it may not always work because I kind of start judging you for judging me in the story. You might want to make one chapter truly from "your" POV so readers can fully fit into her role. (Hope you understand what I'm saying)
-Pretty well use of suspense within your story, readers can guess who the "guy" is etc and you're slowly unveiling the truth which is well done
-But note the use of the twins here. If they are identical you might want to have a relook at your story because having two people who look alike causes a lot of problems. Eg if you know one of them without knowing he has a twin, one day if you meet his twin you're going to be shocked and confused etc
-Lastly I acknowledge your appropriate use of greek idios
Giving you a lower score so you have much room for improvement for the rest of your story. Hwaiting!
Originality (13/15)
Definitely something interesting.
Grammer & Spelling (19/20)
Simple English with no errors.
Flow (6/10)
Penalty on above mentioned point for confusion on POVs. Other than that, I feel that more needs to be put into development of the characters and their relationships and not just a narration of events.
Characterization (6/10)
Much potential here for improvement. "You" obviously suffered from heartbreak and is trying to shut yourself out. Also possibility of troubles being caused in your life so that affects a person a lot emotionally and psychologically. You might want to do a chapter on an actual "your" POV so we can have better understanding on your main character.
Relationship of Yongguk with the people around him needs to be developed as well.
Overall Enjoyment (8/10)
A good read. Ample suspense to keep you wanting more. Well done.
Reviewed by: eunhyuksgal
72/100!
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