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Title (5/5)

Perfect title for the storyline as it gives a sense of mystery and suspense; something lurking in the dark; behind the shadows. And usage of the word shadow is good because it shows Yifan "coming out from the shadows of his past" as well. Well done.
 
Foreward/Description (10/10)
 
Explains Yifan's past and present with a hint of Yixing. Enough mentioned to give readers a good background knowledge before delving into the story and yet leaving behind room for them to let their imaginations and emotions run wild.
 
Appearance (4/5)
 
The only thing I'd criticize about the poster would be; Yifan does not look like Tarzan enough.
 
Plot (15/15)
 
The idea and storyline is great. I especially like to commend you for its maturity, freshness and creativity. 
 
This story centers around quite a lot of violence; murder and ; which is a very matured issue and you handled it very well especially on how Yifan is coping with the aftermath of war. It involves a lot of psychological pain and trauma in which you managed to portray and resolve effectively within Yifan. 
 
I also appreciated how it was not overly gruesome as it appears only in the last 2 chapters.
 
The relationship build-up between the 2 characters was also well done and I liked how Yixing is like this bright shining ray of hope within the dark life of Yifan. Sweet.
 
Overall I just wanted to say that only someone as good a writer as you could pull off this plot perfectly and congratulations you did it.
 
Originality (15/15)
 
Don't think we can find another of such natured stories from other authors and this was fresh to me.
 
Grammer & Spelling (20/20)
 
Once again, nothing to penalize you on at all.
 
Flow (10/10)
 
This story was very very well-paced (a surprise as compared to the rest of your stories I've read). You managed to cut off each chapter at an appropriate timing to keep your readers on the edge of their seats, wanting to see the next relationship development step in the couple. Also the chapters were NOT draggy ;-) 
 
The start led to the end in a smooth way.
 
Characterization (8/10)
 
Taking away some points or else you're going to be getting full marks =p
 
I felt that Yixing's character could be more developed in terms of his personal growth and personality. His existence and role in Yifan's life is clear and fantastic but as a standalone he seems to be rather useless (especially in his position within the village and family)
 
Overall Enjoyment (10/10)
 
I love it and everyone should read it; its short and interesting; a comfortable read.
 
Reviewed by: eunhyuksgal
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aya-ELF #1
Chapter 85: Thank you for the review dear! I was relly shocked with the language part OTL, I'm gonna go fix it right now! By the way, do you think it will be better if I write a simple prologue to explain the life of a demon and what's the benefit to have a mate??
EPIONE #2
Heyy,

I don't know if you remember me, but I was just wondering where you're currently working this year as a reviewer?
I'd love to request from you again.

Best,
Epione
teenme14 #3
Chapter 72: Okay.. Thanks for the review ^^

Now to clarify XD
Title: As you said, the highlight/ of the story has not yet come. So yeahh..
Plot: This is my first chaptered story after my long hiatus from writing. After the hiatus, I wrote a two shot. So, I kinda forgot how to write a chaptered story XD The present time of the story is at the end of Summer (hence, their summer break). Oh, and I plan on making this fic a 40 chaptered fic.
- I guess I haven't mentioned the type of phone she is using. Samsung phones are quite cheap in Korea but are also expensive for people with financial probs. So, back to her phone. The phone she is using is a Samsung Galaxy Win Pro G3812. And she is using pre-paid which you'll have to top-up each time the credit finishes or it expires, whichever comes first.
- The cafe's delivery system works like this: A person will order through phone, and they jot down the name and address of the person. One of the workers will be asked to deliver the drink/food. If the house is near enough, they deliver by foot. If it is rather far, they ride a bike.
-I am not a dancer and... OTL I really need a dancer to help me whenever dancing scenes come up TT.TT
- About Mr. and Mrs. Kim, it will be known in the next chapter that I'm writing now.
Characterization: I am really bad at this XD Jongin's feelings at first was just merely interested. It's not a crush. He just simply feels interested by the girl. Hana & Sehun... We'll know more once we're more into the story XD

So.. yeah.. Thanks ^^ Sorry for the English mistakes. English is not my first language
teenme14 #4
Chapter 62: Thank you for the review! Glad you liked it! ^^ it's a bit fast paced coz I had a deadline to follow and finished it in 2 days xD I was planning on making a special chapter for the part before jongdae confessed to get to know Hye Sun better and how Jongdae came to like her. I was in a rush, so yeah. I was thinking that a LIFETIME to forget was that, he WOULD eventually fall in love with another girl but he would never forget Hye Sun since she was his first love. About the part where she died: I wanted her to die in an accifent rather than in the surgery was because Jongdae's parents died in an accident too which would somehow, idk, increase the pain (whut)
hanajoe #5
Chapter 32: Thanks for the review^^
I know my i'm not good enough in English T-T but i will try my best to write it!
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