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Title (4/5)

I'm not sure if this counts since you did provide an explanation so that's a tad bit unfair. I get your explanation so credits given.
 
Foreward/Description (7/10)
 
It's deep and describes the story well enough for me to know what to expect before diving in. However I would have preferred a more Jiae-centered opening since a bulk of the story is about her.
 
Appearance (1/5)
 
I'm not sure if the poster is supposed to be for the story but it doesnt fit? 
 
Plot (12/15)
 
I personally do like your style of writing and I wasnt confused on the chronological order surprisingly but it might be owing to the fact that I have not read the other parts of the story so I was definitely bound to have some questions mainly revolving around why Jiae is like that; reason for her depression and low self-esteem with a hint of . 
 
You touched on a lot of emotional themes such as suicide, , depression, failed relationships, lack of self worthiness etc so these are all matured themes that tie in with angst. You did a very good technical story addressing these issues but I felt a lack of emotional attraction; ie I couldnt feel for the character. So you might want to look into this, maybe style of writing etc.
 
Originality (15/15)
 
I give you full marks here. I think you chose a special case.
 
Grammer & Spelling (20/20)
 
Nothing to penalize here and I did notice the poetic instances.
 
Flow (10/10)
 
I give you full credit here as well since you managed to successfully eliminate confusion despite the jumps.
 
Characterization (6/10)
 
As mentioned above, this could be due to the lack of knowledge from previous parts so I dont really understand the characters too well. I am however catching snippets here and there.
 
Overall Enjoyment (9/10)
 
Definitely a refreshing read nonetheless. Deep and meaningful.
 
Reviewed by: eunhyuksgal
 
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aya-ELF #1
Chapter 85: Thank you for the review dear! I was relly shocked with the language part OTL, I'm gonna go fix it right now! By the way, do you think it will be better if I write a simple prologue to explain the life of a demon and what's the benefit to have a mate??
EPIONE #2
Heyy,

I don't know if you remember me, but I was just wondering where you're currently working this year as a reviewer?
I'd love to request from you again.

Best,
Epione
teenme14 #3
Chapter 72: Okay.. Thanks for the review ^^

Now to clarify XD
Title: As you said, the highlight/ of the story has not yet come. So yeahh..
Plot: This is my first chaptered story after my long hiatus from writing. After the hiatus, I wrote a two shot. So, I kinda forgot how to write a chaptered story XD The present time of the story is at the end of Summer (hence, their summer break). Oh, and I plan on making this fic a 40 chaptered fic.
- I guess I haven't mentioned the type of phone she is using. Samsung phones are quite cheap in Korea but are also expensive for people with financial probs. So, back to her phone. The phone she is using is a Samsung Galaxy Win Pro G3812. And she is using pre-paid which you'll have to top-up each time the credit finishes or it expires, whichever comes first.
- The cafe's delivery system works like this: A person will order through phone, and they jot down the name and address of the person. One of the workers will be asked to deliver the drink/food. If the house is near enough, they deliver by foot. If it is rather far, they ride a bike.
-I am not a dancer and... OTL I really need a dancer to help me whenever dancing scenes come up TT.TT
- About Mr. and Mrs. Kim, it will be known in the next chapter that I'm writing now.
Characterization: I am really bad at this XD Jongin's feelings at first was just merely interested. It's not a crush. He just simply feels interested by the girl. Hana & Sehun... We'll know more once we're more into the story XD

So.. yeah.. Thanks ^^ Sorry for the English mistakes. English is not my first language
teenme14 #4
Chapter 62: Thank you for the review! Glad you liked it! ^^ it's a bit fast paced coz I had a deadline to follow and finished it in 2 days xD I was planning on making a special chapter for the part before jongdae confessed to get to know Hye Sun better and how Jongdae came to like her. I was in a rush, so yeah. I was thinking that a LIFETIME to forget was that, he WOULD eventually fall in love with another girl but he would never forget Hye Sun since she was his first love. About the part where she died: I wanted her to die in an accifent rather than in the surgery was because Jongdae's parents died in an accident too which would somehow, idk, increase the pain (whut)
hanajoe #5
Chapter 32: Thanks for the review^^
I know my i'm not good enough in English T-T but i will try my best to write it!
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