My Brother's Bestfriend Review
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Title (4/5)
It is an appropriate title but you could choose something more relevant to the topic of arranged marriages or even something that was centered around Ji Eun since she seems like the main character.
Foreward/Description (6/10)
You might want to include some content from the first chapter here instead; maybe a one-liner about the fact that she once had a boyfriend, that Baek Hyun is someone she doesnt like; ie rude instead of boring because you used that word on him later. I like that you add the content from chapter one because it will induce some suspense amongst your readers.
Appearance (4/5)
It is an ok looking suitable poster.
Plot (10/15)
I like the idea in general. Very unique and interesting with a lot of potential in terms of story and character development.
However; it could be partially due to your grasp of the english language that is slightly hindering you from reaching the full potential of detailed description. For instance, more could be done in building up the relationship between Ji Eun and Minhyuk; the deep affection she has for him despite the cold and abusive treatment she receives. This would make us hate Minhyuk and empathize with Ji Eun and have in insight into her deep love for him. This will help because if in the future chapters you wish to make Ji Eun defend Minhyuk, you have to sort of make the readers understand why; which is due to that undying love.
A lot of work needs to be put in in the Ji Eun and Baek Hyun relationship build-up as well. We need to know how exactly they were to each other before the annoucement that they were betrothed to each other. I don't quite get the immense hatred Ji Eun has against Minhyuk as well so maybe more details in the first part would be helpful especially as we walk through how their feelings towards each other will change progressively.
Lots of potential here so hwaiting!
Originality (13/15)
Cute idea as I mentioned above. Arranged marriages always leave a lot of room for emotional development amongst the characters.
Grammer & Spelling (15/20)
This may be your weak point but I would prefer more content/details in your story development.
Flow (8/10)
Relatively well done but the pace is rather fast; you can lengthen each event more.
Characterization (6/10)
As mentioned above, more effort to be put in in bringing out the emotions and relationship individually and between characters.
Overall Enjoyment (8/10)
Could be better written but loved the plot.
Reviewed by: eunhyuksgal
74/100!
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