Silenced
Forbidden Dreamers Review GalleryTitle (4/5) → The title is very original and I like that the word "Silenced" is used because it matched with your story.
Foreword/ Description (8/10) → The description really caught my attention. I love the line "But what if someone accidently brings music into my life?" It captured my attention. In your foreword you explained that colored text means sign language which is good so that readers understands that. However, I think you should use your foreword wisely instead of just having pictures of your characters. You should write a mini preview that will make the readers want to click next.
Appearance (4/5) → The poster is beautiful and so is the quote. I think if you edit your text a little bit more or use a layout, it would look even better.
plot (14/15) → The plot was really interesting. I never thought her father would be abusive to her. I really want to see who she ends up with ^.^
Originality (15/15)→ I wasn't expecting to read what I just read. I have read a story similar to the content except it was about a boy who has mental problems. I think this is pretty original :D
Grammar & Spelling (15/20)→ There were some grammar mistakes. However, I think the biggest problem is the "...." when you use " make sure you end it with a " as well.
Flow (7/10)→ The music/singing part did distracted me a little but otherwise it is good.
Characterization (4/10)→You should describe the way the characters look or else if people didn't know who Luhan or Chanyeol or Kris is then they would have a hard time picturing them.
Overall Enjoyment (10/10)→ I subscribed onto the story. I will recommend this to people that likes slight angst with romance.
81/100!
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